In the United States medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms However there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in ele

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In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients’ medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.

Reducing Costs

First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients’ records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.

Preventing Errors

Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients’ health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.

Aiding Research

Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors’ offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.

The article and the lecturer are about the medical reports. The article of the author proposes three advantages for the storing patients' medical records in electronic databases. However, the lecturer opposes the author's argument.

First, the article states that the use of electronic records can reduce costs because it can save money on storing and transferring medical records. However, the lecturer refutes this points by saying that even though doctors use electronic records, they still need to pay storage fees to keep paper records as backup material, and also because there are doctors' signatures on paper records which might be use in legal proof.

Second, the reading notes that electronic medical records can reduce some medical errors such as illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data and nonstandard record format due to its standardization of forms and legible computer fonts. In contrast, the lecturer argues that most doctors use pen and paper to take notes when they visit patients and there are still unavoidable errors on their handwriting, and then the staff in hospital or clinics will type records in the electronic system.

Third, the author points out that electronic medical records can aid medical research by easily gathering large amounts of data from patient records. The lecturer opposed this points by explain that researchers are restricted their access to patients' records by the Privacy Law in the US. Researchers need to follow the strict and complex rules to get patients' permissions to access their personal heath conditions. Therefore, it would not be useful.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ases. However, the lecturer opposes the authors argument. First, the article states ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, second, so, still, then, therefore, third, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1368.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 253.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40711462451 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63878917287 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537549407115 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.9792314996 49.2860985944 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.363636364 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337814566402 0.272083759551 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127001432876 0.0996497079465 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798364575179 0.0662205650399 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207073137847 0.162205337803 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274578025568 0.0443174109184 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.3589403974 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.2367328918 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ases. However, the lecturer opposes the authors argument. First, the article states ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, second, so, still, then, therefore, third, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1368.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 253.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40711462451 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63878917287 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537549407115 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.9792314996 49.2860985944 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.363636364 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337814566402 0.272083759551 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127001432876 0.0996497079465 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798364575179 0.0662205650399 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207073137847 0.162205337803 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274578025568 0.0443174109184 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.3589403974 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.2367328918 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.