The pie chart shows the percentage of arrest person in five years ending in 1994.The bar graph shows the reasons for most recent arrest.Write a report making comparisons where relevant
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of arrest of persons over five year period ending in 1994.The bar graph indicates the percentage of reasons for most recent arrest arrest by gender.
At first glance it could be seen that 91% of females were not arrested compared to 68% of males.As females stood the largest group that not arrested,males are the largest group that arrested.The males who were arrested accounted for at 32%, while arrested females were at just 9%.
According to the bar graph public drinking is the main reason that influenced for most recent arrest to both gender.Males who drank in public were at around 30% while those females were nearly 37%. Drink driving was the second major that over 25% males were arrested most recently.Other reasons were equal to both males and females 18%. Finally compared to both gender, males were the largest group that arrested most recently according to those reasons.
To sum up, comparing these two groups males were arrested more than females, while females who were not arrested more than those males belongs to reasons.
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To get 7 above what should I
To get 7 above what should I improve in this case???
Well, first of all, you need
Well, first of all, you need to remove all grammar issues. You can reach 6.5-7.0 without grammar errors. Second, the sentences should be clear enough to depict the graphs.
Sentence: The pie charts illustrate the proportion of arrest of persons over five year period ending in 1994.The bar graph indicates the percentage of reasons for most recent arrest arrest by gender.
Description: The fragment arrest arrest contains a repeated word
Suggestion: Delete a possible duplicate word:
As females stood the largest group that not arrested,
As females stood as the largest group that is not arrested,
males were the largest group that arrested
males were the largest group that is arrested
while females who were not arrested more than those males belongs to reasons.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-rater is sensitive.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 10
No. of Words: 186 200
No. of Characters: 877 1000
No. of Different Words: 93 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.693 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.715 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.117 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 61 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 41 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 23 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 9 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.488 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.59 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.857 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.201 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4