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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The maps demonstrate some changes and developments of an area around the sea in Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
By taking a look at the pictures, it can be clearly seen that in 2005 the area was more urbanized in comparison to 1990. In this period of time the place underwent a myriad of transformations. The following descriptions are going to elaborate the differences.
The first point that is worth considering is that in the north-west of the river some trees were cut down and houses were destroyed to make way for skyscrapers. Moving onto the north-west of the school, some forests were chopped down and an airport was constructed and in the north of the hospital some houses were built. Nevertheless, around the middle of the river some houses were knocked down. Also in the south-west of the area a plethora of houses were demolished and two apartment blocks and a supermarket were built. Moreover, in the west of the railway station some trees and houses were pulled down and a new factory sprang up. Nonetheless, near the sea, a ferry service and a new railway were established.
To sum up, comparing two maps reveals some changes and developments from a rural area to an urban place in the period of time.
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Sentence: The first point that is worth considering is that in the north-west of the river some trees were cut down and houses were destroyed to make way for skyscrapers.
Description: The fragment is worth considering is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace worth with adverb
Sentence: Also in the south-west of the area a plethora of houses were demolished and two apartment blocks and a supermarket were built.
Description: The fragment and a supermarket is not usually followed by were
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace were with was
Sentence: Nonetheless, near the sea, a ferry service and a new railway were established.
Description: The fragment a new railway is not usually followed by were
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace were with was
Sentence: To sum up, comparing two maps reveals some changes and developments from a rural area to an urban place in the period of time.
Description: The word sum is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to sum
Description: The fragment maps reveals some is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace reveals with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Sentence: By taking a look at the pictures, it can be clearly seen that in 2005 the area was more urbanized in comparison to 1990.
Error: urbanized Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The first point that is worth considering is that in the north-west of the river some trees were cut down and houses were destroyed to make way for skyscrapers.
Error: north-west Suggestion: northwest
Sentence: Moving onto the north-west of the school, some forests were chopped down and an airport was constructed and in the north of the hospital some houses were built.
Error: north-west Suggestion: northwest
Sentence: Also in the south-west of the area a plethora of houses were demolished and two apartment blocks and a supermarket were built.
Error: south-west Suggestion: southwest
flaws:
Not covering all content like the parking lot and railway station.
One sentence is enough for 'some trees and houses were pulled down', not every where.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 213 200
No. of Characters: 986 1000
No. of Different Words: 108 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.82 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.629 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.742 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 61 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 44 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 30 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.582 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.419 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.665 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4