The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000 in Someland.

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The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000 in Someland.

The bar graph elucidates the fitness membership joined in Someland by gender differences for 1970 to 2000.

During 30 years, the highest number of women who were applying for the fitness membership was recorded in 1985 and 1995 of nearly 3000 each. The lowest number of applicants for the membership was occurred in 1970 as it showed at 1,000 women. The rest of the period, about 2,000 females were applied for the gyms.

In contrast, the male applicants were fluctuated throughout the period but in 1995 the gym received the highest applications (at 5,000 for men). The next highest number of applicants was happened in 1975 of 4,000 men. Two thousand men applied for the membership to exercise in 2000 as it was the lowest applications.

It is apparent that, the number of women doing the exercises showed the similar trends over 30 years. In comparison of 1970s, the applicants increased by 1,000 women in 2000. On the other hand, there were huge fluctuations for the males who were applying for exercises at the gym. In 1995 there was the only year both genders have the highest joining numbers.

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