Arctic deer live on islands in Canada’s arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer’s being unable to follow their age old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
This letter recommends that the decline in deer populations is the result of the deer’s being unable to follow their age old migration patterns across the frozen sea. To support this recommendation the author points out that deer in Canada’s arctic region move over island to island for the search of the food during whole year ,because their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough ,at least some of the year. This argument is problematic in several respects.
First, the author assumes that the habitat is limited to area but the specific time period is not mention. If the habitat in older times was not available but then it is available then the migration by the deer from island to island is not necessary. They can stay at the place where their habitat is available. So the rate of the migration can decrease.
Secondly, the author assumes that according to the report from local hunters the deer populations are declining. Here to prove this numeric data should be given between the last few years survey and present survey so that the data can be compared easily. And the local hunters had killed them for their profit giving reason that the there is decline in population due to global warming.
Finally, it is assume that the due to global warming the sea ice has melt so there is decline deer population is the result of the deer’s being unable to follow migration. Here it cannot be directly assume that due to global warming the ice is melting. It can some other natural calamities like volcano ,etc which melts the ice or it can be some research being carried out by the researchers which contains high heat dissipation in the environment near the island. Due to this all activities the ice melts and converts into sea which decreases the migration rate. And it can be assumed that due to some disease which had spread among the deer’s so that due to this many of them had died. So for assuming any results specific reason with evidence should be provided.
Thus in conclusion the author’s recommendation is not well supported. To strengthen it author must provide a survey that can be done by wildlife sanctuary that is done in specific time period. So that the data can be easily compared and the result can be carried out that what is the main reason behind the decrease in the rate of migration.
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...the search of the food during whole year ,because their habitat is limited to area...
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...ited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enoug...
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...lants on which they feed and cold enough ,at least some of the year. This argument...
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...due to global warming. Finally, it is assume that the due to global warming the sea ...
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...me other natural calamities like volcano ,etc which melts the ice or it can be som...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'well', 'at least', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.227956989247 0.25644967241 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.165591397849 0.15541462614 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0903225806452 0.0836205057962 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0451612903226 0.0520304965353 87% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0322580645161 0.0272364105082 118% => OK
Prepositions: 0.111827956989 0.125424944231 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0537634408602 0.0416121511921 129% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.50824762647 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0365591397849 0.026700313972 137% => OK
Particles: 0.00645161290323 0.001811407834 356% => OK
Determiners: 0.124731182796 0.113004496875 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0279569892473 0.0255425247493 109% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0193548387097 0.0127820249294 151% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2405.0 2731.13054187 88% => OK
No of words: 419.0 446.07635468 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.73985680191 6.12365571057 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334128878282 0.378187486979 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.217183770883 0.287650121315 76% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.140811455847 0.208842608468 67% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0930787589499 0.135150697306 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50824762647 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 207.018472906 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453460620525 0.469332199767 97% => OK
Word variations: 49.0542956974 52.1807786196 94% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0526315789 23.2022227129 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2652378016 57.7814097925 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.578947368 141.986410481 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 23.2022227129 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.631578947368 0.724660767414 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.58251231527 251% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 43.7710086673 51.9672348444 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.61946902655 1.8405768891 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.501244437463 0.441005458295 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.157067702627 0.135418324435 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.10747414191 0.0829849096947 130% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.595939903983 0.58762219726 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170567435119 0.147661913831 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202940530838 0.193483328276 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141675958638 0.0970749176394 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.476705044572 0.42659136922 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0458588494091 0.0774707102158 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.348475959954 0.312017818177 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147049937694 0.0698173142475 211% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 14.657635468 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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