Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on
picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
A real dream is one which you can see which you can see with your eyes open. The society may consider the passion with which one follows this dream to be self-centric, but actually this passion makes following the dream to be a real worthy goal. Inadvertently, everything that a human does can be claimed to be done with an ulterior motive in mind. Every path a human treads, every good deed or even a bad deed a human does, always for some matter has a selfish motive behind it. But, only when a person is happy with his life, he /she can make a difference to the society in which he/she resides. Therefore, if we want to see world as a better place to live in we should in fact help younger generation to follow their dreams and make real efforts to make their dreams come true.
To our astonishment people more often than not, advice younger generation to "follow their dreams" but actually do they really mean what they say? What do the people who advice the youth to follow their dreams actually mean? Most often, they mean following the conventional career goals or following what it seems to be ideal in the society. They would never advice someone be a criminal, when they say "follow your dreams". In fact, it generally means to be a responsible citizen and an individual who can emotionally, financially and socially sustain in this world.
Next thing the pops up in our mind is why do people advice the young people to follow their dreams? There could be probably many reasons behind doing so. Sometimes when our parents for that matter advise us to "follow our dreams", they are the ones who actually are the one to frame up the dream for us. They figure out that they could somehow fulfil their dreams through their children. It is quite possible that a mother would advise her daughter to complete higher education and end up with a lucrative job, which was actually the mother dreams which she couldn't achieve due to financial constraints.
How does one figure out what is better for an individual- a worthy goal and the goal that includes following one's dream? A worthy goal may be the one that ends up in a far superior position, with fame and name, but is that what one really wants. Would an individual be happy after achieving all that is ideally considered to be worthy? Consider it selfish or not, but an individual even if he/she doesn't turn out to be successful in the process of achieving his/her dream would be happy and would make an effort to make the others around him/her happier. Following our dream is a very strong holding force that keeps us grounded and focused and that's all one needs to be satisfied in life. In a way, a real worthy dream is the one that includes following one's dream even if that is considered selfish by the society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 782, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...efforts to make their dreams come true. To our astonishment people more often th...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ociety. They would never advice someone be a criminal, when they say 'follow ...
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Line 5, column 569, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...as actually the mother dreams which she couldnt achieve due to financial constraints. ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...r not, but an individual even if he/she doesnt turn out to be successful in the proces...
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Line 7, column 521, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding others'?
Suggestion: the surrounding others
... happy and would make an effort to make the others around him/her happier. Following our dream is a v...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
... that keeps us grounded and focused and thats all one needs to be satisfied in life. ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'therefore', 'in fact']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.178890876565 0.240241500013 74% => OK
Verbs: 0.180679785331 0.157235817809 115% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0840787119857 0.0880659088768 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0644007155635 0.0497285424764 130% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0697674418605 0.0444667217837 157% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0679785330948 0.12292977631 55% => OK
Participles: 0.0286225402504 0.0406280797675 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.51037663085 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0393559928444 0.030933414821 127% => OK
Particles: 0.0107334525939 0.0016655270985 644% => OK
Determiners: 0.0983899821109 0.0997080785238 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0268336314848 0.0249443105267 108% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.04114490161 0.0148568991511 277% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2810.0 2732.02544248 103% => OK
No of words: 501.0 452.878318584 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60878243513 6.0361032391 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.293413173653 0.366273622748 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.187624750499 0.280924506359 67% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.127744510978 0.200843997647 64% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0858283433134 0.132149295362 65% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51037663085 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 219.290929204 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453093812375 0.48968727796 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.8631158311 55.4138127331 94% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.7727272727 23.380412469 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5004618351 59.4972553346 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.727272727 141.124799967 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7727272727 23.380412469 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.363636363636 0.674092028746 54% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 41.5352023226 51.4728631049 81% => OK
Elegance: 0.875 1.64882698954 53% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364918808867 0.391690518653 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.135046507575 0.123202303941 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.112166167332 0.077325440228 145% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.480023433927 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.118580842015 0.149214159877 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131581396464 0.161403998019 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819405441422 0.0892212321368 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.341483457173 0.385218514788 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.055884141277 0.0692045440612 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261242859587 0.275328986314 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859175094389 0.0653680567796 131% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.4325221239 163% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 7.22455752212 221% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.5995575221 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.