The following is a letter from the parent of a private school student to the principal of that school:
Last year, Kensington Academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition. This company serves low-fat, low-calorie meals that students do not find enjoyable – my son and several of his friends came home yesterday complaining about the lunch options. While the intent of hiring Swift may have been to cause students to eat healthier foods, the plan is just going to cause students to bring their own, less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. If Swift is not replaced with another vendor, there will be serious health consequences for Kensington students.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The opinion of a single parent is promulgated in the argument stating that the so called tasteless and insipid food served at the new cafeteria is not preferred by the kids, and requires the immediate attention of the school board, unless they desire to face serious health consequences for the students at Kensington. Well, the argument is based on some assumed notions by the parents and in the light of some evidence fails to justify the shift to anther vendor.
Firstly, children eat only one meal at school, and if the school authority has taken steps to change the management over the cafeteria, there must be various considerable factors for the whole proposal. Kensington Academy had a health check-up last year, which accounted to more than 50% students overweight. Hence, the school authority considered a shift of the food served at the cafeteria, that could at least decrease the calorie and fat intake in one meal of the day, as the school has no control over the other meals the children have. Additionally, the school board is considering to increase the time devoted to sport activities to keep the children more active, and help them not to be obese in their adult life.
Secondly, student's health concern is not entirely the issue of the School, parents need to take proactive attention in the matter of health and food intake of their kids as well. The board is of the opinion that the parents need to be supportive to this change as they need to understand the intent behind the change. Additionally, they should make the teens aware about a healthy lifestyle starting from a young age. The students need to health conscious right from a very early age. Their consciousness at a right age may help them carry forward that attitude for the years to come. School lunch committee is also thinking of developing a new rule that would forbid any lunch other than the cafeteria, to inculcate a disciplined healthy environment in the school campus.
Finally, reports of many students getting more fit this year have been reported. Many parents and teachers are of the opinion that this could have been possible only because of the change in the food served at the cafeteria, as they have cut down a can of soda, fried chips, etc. that unnecessarily made them less active and added to the unnecessary fat.
Replacing the present vendor with a new one is an easy solution that could placate the kids, but putting their health at stake. As responsible parents and guardians, it’s our duty to act in wellbeing of the kids and help them realize the importance of health. Initiative by parents, teachers and school food committee can help the teens deal with the situation in a stronger way instead of giving in to the unhealthy food, only for a healthy future.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'well', 'at least']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255198487713 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.147448015123 0.15541462614 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0775047258979 0.0836205057962 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0396975425331 0.0520304965353 76% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0264650283554 0.0272364105082 97% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122873345936 0.125424944231 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0396975425331 0.0416121511921 95% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60040747009 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0359168241966 0.026700313972 135% => OK
Particles: 0.00189035916824 0.001811407834 104% => OK
Determiners: 0.141776937618 0.113004496875 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0189035916824 0.0255425247493 74% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00756143667297 0.0127820249294 59% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2789.0 2731.13054187 102% => OK
No of words: 478.0 446.07635468 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.83472803347 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.332635983264 0.378187486979 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.248953974895 0.287650121315 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.163179916318 0.208842608468 78% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.108786610879 0.135150697306 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60040747009 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 207.018472906 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491631799163 0.469332199767 105% => OK
Word variations: 56.6383113055 52.1807786196 109% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 26.5555555556 23.2022227129 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5873217154 57.7814097925 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.944444444 141.986410481 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5555555556 23.2022227129 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.722222222222 0.724660767414 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.58251231527 0% => OK
Readability: 51.4509530451 51.9672348444 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.95575221239 1.8405768891 106% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.472951397404 0.441005458295 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.126774579255 0.135418324435 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0888339449148 0.0829849096947 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.603488890481 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.189236491997 0.147661913831 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.214094803891 0.193483328276 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888945900816 0.0970749176394 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.50997074712 0.42659136922 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.107750356533 0.0774707102158 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.349565315861 0.312017818177 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599376864353 0.0698173142475 86% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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