People's behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making
People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making, I agree with this statement. Most of the time people behavior is response to external situation. If they are treated good, they will be good to that person and to the contrary, if they are disdained by someone they will tend to avoid or hate that person.
Most of the time people react rather than response. They don't think whether the response they are rendering is correct or not. It is as if the external factors are modelling their behaviour. For instance, in a restaurant, there were some ladies sitting at the table and an insect appeared at their table. They started shouting and screaming, creating a chaos in the restaurant. They reacted to the situation. Now, a waiter appeared, took a card from table and put the insect on it, taking the insect out. That is how he responded. And creating an end to all the chaos. If we look back, the response of the ladies was certainly not required. They could have responded well; had they thought through like the waiter did.
Consider another example: Whenever you are criticized you feel angry and you would feel like doing the same to opposite person. Here, an external behaviour is forcing your internal decision about how to react to criticizing. If you listen carefully without judging, you would know that other person has got a point there. And, instead of criticizing, you would try to listen to those points and improve upon them.
Well, it is true that most people are inclined to show above mentioned behaviour. However, not all the people react in same way. Some people think through before reacting like the waiter did and it really calms down the situation. Thus, it is the best way to respond.
In conclusion I would like to say that behaviour of the people is often shaped by external forces. Instead, if they think through, they would be able to contain the situation in a better way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...people react rather than response. They dont think whether the response they are ren...
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'look', 'really', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.148825065274 0.240241500013 62% => OK
Verbs: 0.219321148825 0.157235817809 139% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0574412532637 0.0880659088768 65% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0522193211488 0.0497285424764 105% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0835509138381 0.0444667217837 188% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.114882506527 0.12292977631 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0600522193211 0.0406280797675 148% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.42689406081 2.79330140395 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0391644908616 0.030933414821 127% => OK
Particles: 0.00522193211488 0.0016655270985 314% => OK
Determiners: 0.0992167101828 0.0997080785238 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0208877284595 0.0249443105267 84% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00522193211488 0.0148568991511 35% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1941.0 2732.02544248 71% => OK
No of words: 338.0 452.878318584 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7426035503 6.0361032391 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.58838876751 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.319526627219 0.366273622748 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.233727810651 0.280924506359 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.165680473373 0.200843997647 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0887573964497 0.132149295362 67% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42689406081 2.79330140395 87% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 219.290929204 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.48968727796 110% => OK
Word variations: 57.6374919161 55.4138127331 104% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0833333333 23.380412469 60% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.3361867052 59.4972553346 53% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.875 141.124799967 57% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0833333333 23.380412469 60% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.416666666667 0.674092028746 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 37.4561143984 51.4728631049 73% => OK
Elegance: 0.911764705882 1.64882698954 55% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19682563536 0.391690518653 50% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0750092036216 0.123202303941 61% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0556620755766 0.077325440228 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.479764896962 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130548779985 0.149214159877 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782470856302 0.161403998019 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114281585409 0.0892212321368 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.245915653831 0.385218514788 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0970063937277 0.0692045440612 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135439119469 0.275328986314 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752878873608 0.0653680567796 115% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88274336283 184% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.70907079646 185% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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