Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Yes. There is no denying that for a country and its citizens to be safe and feel safe military is necessary. Be it democratic or autocratic, be it ancient civilisations or modern societies military has played a vital role in the protecting of the society and country. But it doesn't mean that we need to channel all our money into military. Arts is equally important. I agree with the recommendation.
If we consider ancient civilisations such as Mughals, they invested in arts by hiring many artists,singers such as Tansen. Those artists were highly talented individuals.They helped kings during morose times providing them some sort of entertainment. Indeed, Arts plays a very important role by having impact on our emotions. Arts and its contents can make a sad person happy, can enlighten us think from a different perspective. If we don't invest in arts it can not only hurt the livelihood of many artists, there wont be much of enlightening work. Also many of the jobs in these artistic fields will begin to plummet. Which can hurt countries economy.
Arts can also help by teaching future generation how the lives were lived in the current generation . It can serve as a record . Music etc can help learn people by serving as a basic building blocks in the respective artistic fields. Mozart, da vinci,shakespeare work are so astoundingly great, that it is even cherished today.Not only that, its even aiding people to learn and contribute to art fields. Because of that its helping to form a creative society. Indeed art work such as novels, biography can be historical evidences for future generations .
In order for culture to survive we need to have some significant channel of investments from government. For example museums where several of our ancient culture related stores depends on these small channel of money to create and improve their quality collections. If its stopped they wont have many means to survive. Lack of funds surely will result in many having trouble to fulfil even their basic needs. Moreover, there wont be any evidence for our culture and examples of contributions of our previous generation.What good we can we get from militarty alone? If country doesn't even have its own culture.
Finally i would conclude by saying that military is necessary to fight against threats that can hurt the country. But we should not ignore arts. Arts will help us to define who we are and it helps us creating our identity. Arts can aid in the economic development of the country. So it also needs similar investment as much as in the military.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'for example', 'sort of', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.205020920502 0.240241500013 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.171548117155 0.157235817809 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.112970711297 0.0880659088768 128% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0585774058577 0.0497285424764 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0774058577406 0.0444667217837 174% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.121338912134 0.12292977631 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0355648535565 0.0406280797675 88% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87139858002 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0271966527197 0.030933414821 88% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0606694560669 0.0997080785238 61% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0334728033473 0.0249443105267 134% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.010460251046 0.0148568991511 70% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2579.0 2732.02544248 94% => OK
No of words: 437.0 452.878318584 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.90160183066 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.345537757437 0.366273622748 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.263157894737 0.280924506359 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.173913043478 0.200843997647 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.107551487414 0.132149295362 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87139858002 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 219.290929204 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54004576659 0.48968727796 110% => OK
Word variations: 62.9902657009 55.4138127331 114% => OK
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6194690265 145% => OK
Sentence length: 14.5666666667 23.380412469 62% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6850470222 59.4972553346 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9666666667 141.124799967 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5666666667 23.380412469 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.3 0.674092028746 45% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.21349557522 480% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 40.8824561404 51.4728631049 79% => OK
Elegance: 1.1768707483 1.64882698954 71% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29931696585 0.391690518653 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0634112259661 0.123202303941 51% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0570440715332 0.077325440228 74% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.388533630449 0.547984918172 71% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.129882036359 0.149214159877 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923055880162 0.161403998019 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103676853624 0.0892212321368 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.188055310987 0.385218514788 49% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0493202510117 0.0692045440612 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20395275291 0.275328986314 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109355200427 0.0653680567796 167% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.4325221239 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88274336283 164% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.70907079646 295% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.