Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?working at home using computers or telephones is better than working in the office.
The question is whether working at home using computers or telephones is better than working in the office or not. In my perspective, it may be easy; however working at home will never have any profit for us. The most important part of working is that part which we can obtain a lot of experience from other people, because this helps us to improve our other skills. My arguments and reasons are listed below that they will strengthen my point of view:
First, when you work at an office, since you can meet a lot of person whether the colleague or the client, you will have a great chance for getting familiar with them, consequently you can make new friends. As we all know, having different friends is equal with gaining different experiences and without these experiences we will not be able to boost our performance in any major in diverse sections of society. Friends are not just a way for achieving information, but they can provide delighted time for us. We can go to cinema, trip, and coffeehouse and so on with each other; as a result we will have a positive view toward life.
Second, working at out can make us independent unlike working at home. For instance, my brother is a software engineer and he prefers to work at home. I think that he does not experience any hardship, because my mother provides breakfast or lunch, coffee and fruit for him and even he does not wash his dishes, and he expect us to be calm. In fact he cannot boost their performance as working under pressure or communication other people. In fact he has become to a shy person that even he would rather to buy his all clothes or other things on internet without going to out.
Third, working at out can be very appealing, because there are a large number of occurrences with different people. Sometimes you have to take risk and change your work with regarding to different condition. In my vantage point, life is the short and if we do not experience these types of things, we will be a dead person.
As I have illustration, I strongly would rather work in out. Working at home can have some advantages like saving money or time (instead of using taxi or bus for going to office), but also its disadvantages outweigh its advantages. If you improve your interpersonal skills, take a job in out of home.
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Essay evaluation report
since you can meet a lot of person whether the colleague or the client
since you can meet a lot of persons either the colleague or the client //either...or
he has become to a shy person
he has become to be a shy person
flaws:
1. No. of Words: 413 while No. of Different Words: 206 //it means it is wordy.
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
2. Don't list reasons in the introduction and conclusion both. This will create duplicated content.
3. More sentences varieties wanted. Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence. Look:
First, when
you work at an office, since
you can meet a lot of person whether the colleague or the client,
you will have a great chance for getting familiar with them, consequently
you can make new friends. As
we all know, having different friends is equal with gaining different experiences and without these experiences
we will not be able to boost our performance in any major in diverse sections of society. Friends are not just a way for achieving information, but
they can provide delighted time for us.
We can go to cinema, trip, and coffeehouse and so on with each other; as a result
we will have a positive view toward life.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 1830 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.431 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.521 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.737 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.252 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.38 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.217 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun person seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of people', 'a lot of persons'.
Suggestion: a lot of people; a lot of persons
...u work at an office, since you can meet a lot of person whether the colleague or the client, yo...
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Line 4, column 318, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'expects'.
Suggestion: expects
...ven he does not wash his dishes, and he expect us to be calm. In fact he cannot boost ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...an be very appealing, because there are a large number of occurrences with different people. Some...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nal skills, take a job in out of home.
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in fact', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.199124726477 0.229887763892 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.164113785558 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0634573304158 0.0866891130778 73% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0481400437637 0.046263068375 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.105032822757 0.0685040099705 153% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.140043763676 0.118717715034 118% => OK
Participles: 0.0459518599562 0.0351676179071 131% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5938747555 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0240700218818 0.0309702414327 78% => OK
Particles: 0.00656455142232 0.00188951952338 347% => OK
Determiners: 0.0634573304158 0.0887237588012 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0393873085339 0.0209618222197 188% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00656455142232 0.0139019557991 47% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2296.0 2387.08602151 96% => OK
No of words: 413.0 408.028673835 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5593220339 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.297820823245 0.338922669872 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.230024213075 0.251872472559 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.123486682809 0.174417080927 71% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.09200968523 0.112833075102 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5938747555 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513317191283 0.524397521467 98% => OK
Word variations: 57.3660239229 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.9444444444 20.5533526081 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8401483912 48.84282405 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.555555556 120.699889404 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9444444444 20.5533526081 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.888888888889 0.644075263715 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 45.946865752 45.7405998639 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.21379310345 1.45489161554 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320850005979 0.300154397459 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0820583886139 0.103427244359 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0593294052217 0.0752933317313 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.481268743484 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0993434971435 0.151897553556 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123683617217 0.114077575197 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149021351227 0.0781384742642 191% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.208817632854 0.336927656856 62% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0307080456139 0.067059652881 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203858064572 0.210909579961 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0896100539508 0.0618886996521 145% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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