Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
School commercialism has come under immense scrutiny and criticism over the past few decades. Some may argue that it is fair for public schools to collaborate with advertising companies and benefactors as an alternate stream of raising revenue to offset budget cuts by the government. It can also be argued as one more commercial at schools or on the school bus would not make a difference in the mind of a child.
On the contrary, recent studies have successfully argued that it is in fact more harmful than previously thought towards the well-being of a growing child.
In my opinion, such advertising creates bias within the young mind of a child. Rather than nurturing these children to be creative and to have strategic thinking, it creates followers. Not only does advertising in schools expose kids to marketing of harmful products, it teaches students that everything is for sale. Research has shown that children who are exposed to excessive advertising face negative repercussions to their health, self-esteem, values, body-image, learning processes and personal development.
Similarly, marketing undermines critical thinking and derails public education's most important mission of helping children become active, thinking participants in a democratic society. Schools can either educate students to become good citizens or train them to become passive consumers. They cannot do both.
In conclusion, yes, kids are exposed to advertising all the time, but schools should not endorse and add to the constant marketing messages in their lives which may be detrimental to their development towards becoming a whole individual. It is also apparent that these benefit only the agencies, while harming students and leaving schools with little to show for their efforts.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...ism over the past few decades. Some may argue that it is fair for public schools to c...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'similarly', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'in my opinion', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252459016393 0.247107183377 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.15737704918 0.155533422707 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108196721311 0.0946595960268 114% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0459016393443 0.0501214627716 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0426229508197 0.0437548338989 97% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12131147541 0.122226691241 99% => OK
Participles: 0.055737704918 0.0403226058552 138% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92635744258 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0426229508197 0.0326793684256 130% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0688524590164 0.0861772015684 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0229508196721 0.021408717616 107% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00655737704918 0.011925033212 55% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1785.0 1933.35771543 92% => OK
No of words: 277.0 316.048096192 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.4440433213 6.12580529183 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20517956788 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.451263537906 0.374742101984 120% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.368231046931 0.28420135186 130% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.249097472924 0.203846283523 122% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.162454873646 0.137316102897 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92635744258 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.037074148 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613718411552 0.56093040696 109% => OK
Word variations: 67.5586138167 60.7387585426 111% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0891783567 81% => OK
Sentence length: 21.3076923077 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6618063522 49.517814964 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.307692308 127.492653851 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3076923077 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.923076923077 0.814263465372 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 58.1307970008 49.1944974215 118% => OK
Elegance: 1.74666666667 1.69124875643 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167362559786 0.332605444948 50% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0869602991119 0.102741220458 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0707056107843 0.0668466124924 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.566527937352 0.534860350844 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.189230246613 0.148594505496 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672492044951 0.134430193775 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525573241121 0.0742795772207 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.178263627136 0.324371583561 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0368062756494 0.0638462369009 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10195887927 0.228012699653 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287791903249 0.058150111329 49% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.68436873747 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 5.90881763527 51% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 10.0 10.4468937876 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.