A/D: Parents should give school-age children money as reward for getting a high mark in their schools.
Throughout the history, one of the main stimuli of human’s success has been the money. Generally, monetary issues are accounted as the powerful motivations that can draw people to particular conducts. A plethora of people is in the conviction that giving money to children is a good tool to encourage them to continue or repeat their acceptable manner. Contrary to this popular belief, there are those who argue that highlighting the role of money in the school-age children brings the variety of disadvantages to their life. I am of the opinion that, money is not a sensible means as a reward, and the following explanation will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, the complexity of today’s world puts on different kinds of pressure and stress to the society, and money is the primary element of modern life which becomes an integral part of it. Undoubtedly, children as one the most vulnerable segments has been affected by this simple and complicated factor. Children encounter various kinds of financial issues everywhere during a day; from their home to the society and school. Therefore, they have already influenced dramatically, and it would not be sensible if their parents distribute their life with giving them money as a reward. In fact, monetary issue should not be a matter of concerns for children in that age.
Another crucial fact that should be taken into consideration is that school-age children, notably in early ages, cannot judge what is appropriate for their life, so they want to have whatever they like. In this circumstance, giving money to them may have adverse consequences in their life; however, it may encourage them to continue their good deeds. Apparently, the importance of the subject is applying the correct and useful approach that children can express their desires and their parents fulfill their suitable requirements while not giving them money as a wise control point. Indeed, this element highly depends on the age-category of the kids, and in higher ages, for instance in high school, familiarizing them with these issues helps the teenagers that not only appreciate the money that they have but also do not spend too much money for their demands.
On the basis of the point mentioned above, I am convinced that children should not urge to committing particular actions due to taking money as a reward. Obviously, pushing the children to financial issues have bad impact on their life, in addition to the fact that they may misuse their given money for wrong intentions.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'apparently', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in fact']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229787234043 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.13829787234 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0872340425532 0.0866891130778 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0574468085106 0.046263068375 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.063829787234 0.0685040099705 93% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129787234043 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0404255319149 0.0351676179071 115% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.77234938866 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.031914893617 0.0309702414327 103% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0957446808511 0.0887237588012 108% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0234042553191 0.0209618222197 112% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127659574468 0.0139019557991 92% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2554.0 2387.08602151 107% => OK
No of words: 419.0 408.028673835 103% => OK
Chars per words: 6.09546539379 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.36276849642 0.338922669872 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.288782816229 0.251872472559 115% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.200477326969 0.174417080927 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.124105011933 0.112833075102 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77234938866 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525059665871 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 59.5550654034 59.2087087015 101% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 26.1875 20.5533526081 127% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3869015097 48.84282405 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.625 120.699889404 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1875 20.5533526081 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8125 0.644075263715 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 55.0657816229 45.7405998639 120% => OK
Elegance: 1.54098360656 1.45489161554 106% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244452524299 0.300154397459 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.132397765684 0.103427244359 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0611796832447 0.0752933317313 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.560157490691 0.497263757937 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133274068514 0.151897553556 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116521159419 0.114077575197 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586402221598 0.0781384742642 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.486607294372 0.336927656856 144% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0107680414956 0.067059652881 16% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192612093587 0.210909579961 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047882349566 0.0618886996521 77% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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