The chart shows student expenditure over a three-year period in the United Kingdom. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
You should write at least 150 words.
The chart describes the expenditure of student in United Kingdom during three years from 1996 to 1999. The expenditure was calculated in 8 types such as accommodation, essential travel, non-essential travel, children, course expenditure, entertainment, food and the last was expenditure of other.
The biggest expenditure from the student was in entertainment, in 1996 student spent 26% for entertainment while in 1999 they spent 31% for it. It means that during the period the expenditure on entertainment increased 5%. The second biggest expenditure of student was on accommodation, they spent 23% for it in 1996 but in 1999 the chart showed that the expenditure on accommodation declined 3% than 3 years before, student just spent 20% in 1999.
Expenditure on children was only 2% during the period, it was the lowest expenditure of the student. The second lowest expenditure of student was on non-essential travel, but during 3 years, the expenditure declined 1% from 4% in 1996 to 3% in 1999.
In conclusion, entertainment and accommodation were the major contribution for student expenditure. The student could not control the spending on entertainment, it increased significantly. Student should pay big attention to entertainment spending.
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