Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?
Over sixty years after a colonial period, transportation occurs in each country which has basically derived from natural resources as a major energy to operate. There is undoubted that "oil booming" becomes reward for human life. Conversely, other people argue that fossil fuel should be leveled in expensive rates due to oil which derived from cheap price that enable to pull car owners. Obviously, traffic problems will be appearing, and quality of air will decrease. This essay will examine the greatest significant of nonrenewable resources in modern era for facing environmental balances.
Common perspectives believe that gasoline should be affordable for citizens who use private cars to work or to travel, but drawbacks of private cars causes crowded in road and disequilibrium of ozone. Moreover, greenhouse effect occurs and embarks human life to global warning. On the other hand, economists debate that the effect from expensive price of gasoline will produce unstable in macroeconomics levels. Particularly, inflation will be increasing dramatically due to high price of liquid-fuels pull-up lot of prime goods. Therefore, citizens enable to trap in impoverishment.
Finally, first solution to avoid the impact of nonrenewable resources, which is logic in modern time, is shifting to an alternative energy. For example, electronic-car gets energy from solar system and enables to reduce consumption of oil. The second solution, which derived from a government, is a law to pay "green taxes" for driving private cars.
In nutshell, traffic and pollution cutbacks depend on public paradigm to use an alternative energy and strength policy which provided by a government to control ownership's of exclusive cars.
- the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. 65
- Many people think that international travel will decrease in future. Do you think it is a positive development? Give examples from your experience. 80
- The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries. 70
- Cheap air travel is welcomed because some people think it will give ordinary people more freedom to travel by air. However, others suggest that the air travel should be more expensive in order to discourage people from traveling by air as it will cause en 56
- The pie charts show the proportion of the world s population living in urban and rural areas in 1990 and the forecast until 2025 40
Sentence: There is undoubted that 'oil booming' becomes reward for human life.
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Sentence: Conversely, other people argue that fossil fuel should be leveled in expensive rates due to oil which derived from cheap price that enable to pull car owners.
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Sentence: The second solution, which derived from a government, is a law to pay 'green taxes' for driving private cars.
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Sentence: In nutshell, traffic and pollution cutbacks depend on public paradigm to use an alternative energy and strength policy which provided by a government to control ownership's of exclusive cars.
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flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Words: 264 350
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.032 0.07
Always focus on one thing in one paragraph in order to get high coherence. Correct way or 'pattern' could be like this:
Para 1: introduction.
Para 2:First,reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples (around 2 sentences) + small conclusions(1-2 sentences).
Para 3:Second,reason 2 ,blabla... do the same thing like First
Para 4:Third, reason 3 blabla... do the same thing like First but shorter
Para 5: Conclusion.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 264 350
No. of Characters: 1422 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.031 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.386 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.938 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.19 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.522 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.032 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5