Claim: In any field--business,politics,education,government--those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
The speaker pointed out that it must be right for any enterprise to change their leadership periodically if they want to be success. Actually, it may be true that there is an efficacious method to refresh their mind and retrospect themselves by revitalization through new leadership, especially in politic or business domains. While is it always useful and will this approach leads to some bad influence remains discussion. In my point, it may not be warranted to be powerful in anytime.
Admittedly, many fields insist such proposal as a principle for its promising capacity to keep an enterprise ...
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Sentence: Whereas in many cases it result in a failure because of blindness to specific conditions.
Description: The fragment it result in is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace result with verb, past tense
Sentence: Actually, there are many pivotal factors deciding whether or not you can success.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to can and success
Sentence: To sum up, revitalization of leaders is surly a scientific way of managing, but it should be depend on concrete surroundings.
Description: The fragment be depend on is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace depend with adjective
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Score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2152 1500
No. of Different Words: 242 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.993 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.902 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.541 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.271 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.505 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5