Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? With the help of technology, the students now a days can learn more information and learn it more quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the era of information technology exploration, information can be accessed more and more easily such as through Internet. Due to advancements in the information technology, the work is becoming more easier for students and it is saving a lot of time by using this advanced technology. Technological advancements has a great impact on students life. I would elaborate my explanation in further paragraphs by quoting various reasons and examples.
Firstly, In the past, students spent time on going to the library, searching books and reading so many books just to get a little information necessary to them or they need to arrange time and place to meet their friends or teachers, tutors to ask what they want to know. The library is also limited in sources, numbers of editions, or the books might have out dated information. But nowadays, with only a computer connected to Internet, students can search every kind of information of all aspects, no limit in space and time, therefore once student is curious to learn, the amount of information they can receive is really huge.
Moreover, technology also help students to learn very quickly. The speed of transmission of information is surprising. For instance, I often use Google to search websites related to my key word. And billions of results can be found in just less than 5 seconds. So, it saves our time much more than searching in traditional way.
Also, technology provide us many ways to share our information everywhere and every time. For example, we use cell phones to share information through MMS, SMS, phone calls or even emails among friends. In addition, students can put their lecture into their I pod, portable music player so that they can listen them whenever they want.
However, searching for information on the net has disadvantages too. It is difficult to ensure the information is accurate or not because the publishing websites do not have the controlling policies as that of publishing books. Yet, in general , it is still true that the technology provides greater information and help the students to learn more quickly.
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If I change my last paragraph
If I change my last paragraph with better conclusion how much score I can expect? Please do reply me, so that I can correct my mistakes.
It can reach 24-25. Still you
It can reach 24-25.
Still you need to pay attention on the content organization in the essay body, try to understand this pattern:
Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree.
Para 2:First,reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 2 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3:Second,reason 2 ,blabla... do the same thing like First
Para 4:Third, reason 3 blabla... do the same thing like First but shorter
Para 5: Conclusion.
is becoming more easier for students
is becoming much easier for students
Sentence: Also, technology provide us many ways to share our information everywhere and every time.
Description: The fragment technology provide us is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace provide with verb, past tense
flaws:
Don't change your idea at the end of the essay by 'However'. Always support one side or discuss both side according to the topic.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 349 350
No. of Characters: 1707 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.322 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.891 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.813 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.389 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.056 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.488 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5