The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping.
Nowadays the increasing amount of traffic in big cities causes serious environmental and economical damages, so the governments try to find out effective solutions for this actual problem. Some people claim that the solution can be with reducing the need for people to travel different places such as home, work, education and shopping whereas others do not consider it as the better one. I am not in consummate accord with this statement and want to explain my opinion and recommend other ways of solutions.
To begin with, our need for cars, buses and other types of transports is rising day by day depending on the demands of the modern life, therefore reducing the need for them can be difficult for us in such situation. To my mind, governments must take into consideration some factors like the width of ways, the location of buildings, factories where the dense of people is more, precisely must try to avoid some constructive mistakes. For instance, sometimes the loose way and wrong regulating traffic can cause unavoidable traffic jams.
In addition, some psychological and enlightening advices and calling drivers and people to be more patient can be useful in reducing the tension during traffic jams.
On the other hand, we cannot completely deny the fact that reducing the need of people can affect the traffic systems effectively. As to exemplify, online studying and working can be considered as better one but it seems unrealistic to wait all people follow such technological ways.
So, to conclude, in my opinion, government can prefer more acceptable alternative ways to solve this problem.
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Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree.
Para 2:First,reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 2 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3:Second,reason 2 ,blabla... do the same thing like First
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