TPO 32
Young people today have no influence on the important that determine the future of society as a whole.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that future of the every society is of importance. It is not far-fetched to find some controversy and debate surrounding some aspects namely, which group in a society plays a crucial role in determining important decisions. One important opinion states that young people today have no influence on making the important decision for the future of the society. I personally repudiate this thesis. In what follows I will delve into some of the outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite reason coming to mind is that in the modern age and day we live, young people are the most open-minded group of people. The adolescence is a period of life which people can more make risk and have more power to follow their dreams. They mostly affect their society by using the internet and social media with their new ideas that most of the time deserves a vast investment on that. One of the most important examples of that is recent president election in my country, Iran. Two weeks ago there was the president election here between two important candidates from two opposite parties. By advertisement of the most of the juvenile who put so much energy to broaden the people horizon one of the candidates who had a very positive and promising and peaceful planning, elected. So it shows that young people how much can have influence in some of the most event of their society by their efforts.
Another significant point deserves some words here is that today young people are the future parents who can be more influential for their children. If the governments put much more emphasis on their physical and mental health, they will have a promising future and a safe society. They are the active workforce of the society who can make revolution and change in all aspects of the society, such as technology, medical, engineering, etc. Take the founder of Facebook as an example. He was a very young person when he established this channel and social media. Facebook had a crucial role in the protests and revolutions in all over the world. It opened the mind of all people, for instance in the Arab country and even in the election of the US.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to the conclusion that young people due to their more power of risk and their open mind play a vital role in the future of any society. Consequently, authorities should put more emphasis on the young people. if we want a very hopeful future and safe society for ourselves and other society as well, we need to pay more attention and respect to their personal and mental issues.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...esis. In what follows I will delve into some of the outstanding reasons. The first exquisi...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... put more emphasis on the young people. if we want a very hopeful future and safe ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, so, well, for instance, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74398249453 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60314976187 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466083150985 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6781187778 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5454545455 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7727272727 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227091939017 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635462440705 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083246893248 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155881329464 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090268946297 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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