tpo 1
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Activities that universities consider for the students have an important role in their education and life. I mean these activities can have positive or negative consequence in their future life. I agree with this idea that sports and social activities are as important as the libraries and classes and should obtain equal financial supports. Here you can see my reasons.
First of all, it can help students make new friends. In all of the universities, there are a lot of people who become from another countries, cities and they do not have any friend. Also, some students have not this chance to make a friend in classes and libraries.This sports and social activities would be a great opportunity for those students, to find a new friend. In addition, they have a common idea about sports and social activities which can make their friendship so closer.
Psychology factor is another noticeable reason. Nowadays, students experience a huge improvement and progress in a different field of science and engineering such as physics, chemistry and electronics. In this progressive worlds, the main duty of the students is study hard enough to keep the pace with new inventions and discoveries which prepare them for future career and responsibilities. Most of the students are so sensitive and will feel stressed and pressured because of their assignments and math problems. So, the sports and social activities would be a great idea for the students to have some enjoyable time and play with their other students. It helps them to keep away the tension and as a result, have a healthy mind.
On the other hand, some people think that financial supports must just consider for libraries and classes. Mostly, it persuades parents and children to sign up at this university. Actually, the main factor that makes the universities the best in comparison with other universities is its equipment in the libraries and the quality of the classes. So, it is reasonable that university just spends its money for libraries and classes. However, I do not agree with this idea. According to the research that was carried out by the University of Calgary, nowadays, most of the students are interested in sports and social activities. They consider it as important as classes and library. Hence, it is sensible that university spends money for both of them equally.
In conclusion, there a lot of reason to prove my claim that the social and sports activities are as significant as classes and library.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... can help students make new friends. In all of the universities, there are a lot of people...
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Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
... make a friend in classes and libraries.This sports and social activities would be a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, hence, however, if, so, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07110091743 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85914435874 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447247706422 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2601152602 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.125 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04166666667 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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