important chang in you home town
Some of my neighborhoods think if we will have the opportunity to change one important thing in our country it will be planting more trees. They think by panting more trees our community will look better. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that if I will change one important thing in my home town it will be the fact to connect people together. Having a community center is the best way to connect people together. The basis of my opinion is social, medical, and personally
First of all, people come and go and they do not know each others. By having a community center in the town people will have the chance to know each other better. For example, the entire neighborhood will have the opportunity to meet once weekly. They will able to talk together. People in my community could increase their social net work that way. Parents could know each other more and they can plan for future trip all together. Even the children in my community will have the opportunity to play with each other. We can donate some money to build a park or a play ground to our children. Connecting together will provide the entire member in our community to be happier and increase their social net work.
Second from the medical perspective, our town is so small. We have many older people live by themselves, no one take care of them. If we have a community center in our town, we can help those old people. For example, we can make a statistic and count how many elderly are there. Further more, we could ask for volunteers to help those old people. Elderly need a lot of medical treatment. We can invest some money by making a senior home in our town. Senior home will not be beneficial for the people live in the town but also for old people from others town surrounding us. Having a community center in our town would help us address the needs for all people.
Lastly, personally, I am a mom I have three children in the mean time I a working full time. Sometimes I fell over whelmed between the work and the children. Having a community center in our town would help people to know each other better. Thus they can try to help themselves, for example, I and my neighborhood can help each other out, how? We could know each other schedule and accommodate the time perfectly, so she can take care of my children while I am working and I can take care of her children while she is working. That is one way may work. The other way is that each parent donates some money to build a day care, and some free parents volunteer to work in the day care. The community center is really helpful to our community
In conclusion, for the reasons I stated above I believe that havening a community center in our town will benefit the all the people stating from children ending with elderly people
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- TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 88
- Is it more important to work hard many hours and support your family well, or spend more hours with your family and build good relationships? 60
- TPO INTEGRATED 47 73
- tpo integrated 3
- indpendent essay 49 3
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, look, may, really, second, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 29.0 9.8082437276 296% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2324.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50387596899 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41116738144 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.387596899225 0.524837075471 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9383557363 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9677419355 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6451612903 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.67741935484 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113662395049 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366678217052 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679684814297 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0743113760324 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603396162163 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.48 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.