The chart below show information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant (Study Sample)
The chart gives information about the number of bee colonies in the United States and how much honey they produced between 1970 and 2010.
In 1970, there were 4, 000, 000 bee colonies in the country and this rose to approximately 4, 200, 000 in 1980. However, over the next 30 years this number decreased by more than a million every ten years with the result that in 2010, there were about 1, 800, 000 colonies left.
During the same period, the amount of honey which the colonies produced also dropped. In 1970, American bees produced 130, 000 tons of honey. This fell by 20, 000 tons to 110, 000 tons in 1980. However, in the next ten years, honey production rose to 120, 000 tons in 1980. It then dropped to just 70, 000 tons in 2010.
Overall, the chart show that both the number of colonies and the amount of honey which bees make have fallen during the 40-year period. However, the relationship is not an exact one because when colonies increased in 1980, honey production fell, while when colonies decreased in 1990, honey production rose.
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Sentence: Overall, the chart show that both the number of colonies and the amount of honey which bees make have fallen during the 40-year period.
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