The bar chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The bar chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar chart below provides information about the number of leisure time males and females of five different employment status enjoyed in a week in the year 1998-1999. As is observed from the graph, men and women of umemployed and retired categorises had more free time than people from other groups. When data is available for both gender, men also enjoyed more leisure time than women.
Full-time employed males had more than 40 hours leisure time per week and females from the same status enjoyed about 37 hours
No data has been provided for the part-time job and house-staying men, while part-time employed women and housewives had 40 hours and more than 50 hours spare time respectively.
On the other hand, approximately 85 hours for leisure time was enjoyed by umemployed men compared to 78 hours of that was spent for leisure activities by unemployed women. The retired people had the same amount of leisure time enjoyed by both sexes as the unemployed group.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 33.7804878049 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 809.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93292682927 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55098953168 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518292682927 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 247.5 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.114634146341 872% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.820957944 43.030603864 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.833333333 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 22.9334400587 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.23603664747 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328360346152 0.215688989381 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184044162794 0.103423049105 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809480438135 0.0843802449381 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208365736728 0.15604864568 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820016358741 0.0819641961636 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.2329268293 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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