TPO10-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In nowadays society, there are recent debates over whether playing computer games is a waste of time and should children be allowed to play them or not. Some people think that playing computer games is a good relaxation for children while others choose to forbid their children play computer games for the reason that it will waste their time to study. As a matter of fact, the issue is so complicated and controversial that it is impossible to find a universal answer to this question. I do not concur with the allegation that if children are obsessed with playing computer games, it will absolutely have bad influence on their study. Nevertheless, as far as I'm concerned, I endorse that computer games can do good to children.
To begin with, creativity and intelligence is admittedly very significant for a child, and we couldn't deny that computer games could help to improve them. For instance, everybody knows Steve Jobs for the company he founded because of the reason that the whole world is using IPhone. His success is based on many things, but one of the basic reasons is his creativity. He invented such a smartphone that no one could say no to it however expensive it was for the reason that this phone contained so many functions, which made it looks like a small computer in our hand. In this rapidly developing world, creativity is more and more important, which means if you can come up with something different and novel, you will be the outstanding one.
Further, I want to point out that happiness and having fun is also very important for children as well as adults. For example, when Kevin Durant, one of the top NBA players, was playing basketball in OKC, basketball was the only thing that mattered to him. His coach would always say: "Kevin, did you eat your breakfast today?" or "Kevin, you need to wash your face." "Kevin, you need a haircut." He had no clue, he just wanted to play basketball. But after the injury in 2014, Durant realized that life is not only about basketball so that he tried to experience everything that is out there. Knowing how to enjoy life and have fun, Kevin became a better basketball player and a better self, then received his first championship and FMVP.
However, we shall never neglect that playing computer games for too long a time will definitely interfere with children's study. They will be addicted to it and can't help playing computer games. Under such circumstance, it is parents' responsibility to supervise their children and tell them what is more important at their age.
To sum up, I believe that playing computer games do have good effects on children for it can improve their intelligence, stimulate their creativity and let them get relaxed. Although some people are concerned about their children get absorbed in games and quit their study, this worry can be eliminated if parents can lead their children in a right way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ated if parents can lead their children in a right way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, then, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, as a matter of fact, as well as, to begin with, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2437.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86427145709 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71166481763 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510978043912 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.2738814337 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.85 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.05 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317457671768 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101750265695 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0941420352834 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184668089131 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112885333885 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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