Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Parents have always had an imperative role in their children's lives, since they help them in every aspects of life. However, some parents are much busy and do not have a lot of time to share with their children. Therefore, they should have a plan for the time they have with their children. Some people believe that parents should help their children in their assignments, while others opine that, it is a good idea to play and make fun with them. In my perspective, I have a great preference for the view point of the second group due to the following reasons:
The first important reason should be mentioned is that, parents who share their limited time with their children in funny activities or playing games with them can appeal their children trust especially their teenage ones who need talk with their parents and hang out with them to solve their social problems. In this case, the parents could be their friends who do not insist on just one part of their living that is their education. For instance, as I was child my father was a commander in aviation force. He did not enough time to share with me and my sisters, however, he played with me at weekends, we could go to movie and have funny matches together. I remember that I studied hard during the week and finished my homework by the weekends, in order to have enough time to share with my father and have fun. We have always talked about different subjects and especially about my feelings and decisions. As you see, children could trust their parents and talk about their dilemmas, if mothers or fathers play with them rather than checking their assignment in their limited time they have.
Furthermore, children could learn from their parents, different aspects of life during their playing games or sports with their parents. A prime example from my own experience may shed some lights on this point. During those days that my father was too busy to send his time during the week with his family, he had enough time to play with me at weekends and learned me how i should behave in a competition and how i could take differently responsibilities and do my best. He encouraged me to improve my social behavior as well as my personality to become a successful person in my life.
Hence, as parents paly with their children they could teach them important lessons for their lives.
To sum up, according to the all aforementioned reasons, i prefer that parents spend their limited time by playing with children since not only do their children learn important subjects of life but also they could trust their parents.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2136.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69450549451 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42885881647 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452747252747 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.5947238292 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.647058824 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7647058824 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35656012143 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144661256968 0.076458572812 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102486682603 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221337450879 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0929484022425 0.0645574589148 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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