Do you agree or disagree?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Even though many sociologists and some of the people argue as if it is a general truth that in modern societies young people manage and consider their future with new various technological mechanisms, I firmly recommend that in novel world don’t allow to juvenile persons to influence and make prominent decisions for their future. And also government and adult people have never promote and encourage youthful people to participate in mammoth determination of communities. And believe it or not, young people are intelligent persons who can improvement and development their future of society. I will elaborate my idea with some significant reasons in the following paragraphs.
One of the meaningful reasons coming to my mind at first is that if we want to witness an improvement and successful upcoming society, we should encourage and admire young people to share in solving and evolving difficult problem of society rather than old and wont people in top situations of government. Also there has been some research done on the effect of interring and influencing fresh thought and concept of young people in sensitive circumstances of developmental countries had excellent and efficient result beyond doubt. For example, my parents used to admire me to giving my idea in all of our plans in family, and now as I growing up, really I motivate to join in community and influence on important decision of future society.
Another my remarkable reason is that managers and administers don’t believe and agree with young people due to they think mature persons don’t have enough experiences and skills in their major and field. Not only government don’t let young people influence in significant conditions and jobs, but also they deny young people opinions and abilities. For instance, in my country, Iran, there are a lot of high educated students who are unemployed and they are looking for job, though, government and managers in most companies have plenty problems and actually they need this skilled persons to solve their problems.
As a result, one the basic of points mentioned above, I strongly agree with this statement that in modern and complex world young people don’t principle in essential situation of their society as an important role in future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: some
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Suggestion: promoted
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Suggestion: Also,
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Suggestion: I am
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
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...n of their society as an important role in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, look, really, so, for example, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21951219512 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8515950301 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547425474255 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.5647425158 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.090909091 100.406767564 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5454545455 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252443460297 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102129652315 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500787657653 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15965537471 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327418068836 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 11.7677419355 169% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.