The bar chart below shows the percentage of men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Hien Chu on Wed, 01/10/2018 - 01:48

The bar chart provides information regarding the proportion of male and female who were interested in physical activities in different age groups in Australia in 2010.
It is obvious that the percentages of women who did regular exercises in different ages were higher than those of men, except for the group 15 to 25 years old. However, the elderly shared the same interest in this field.
To be specific, in 2010, the proportion of men just surpassed it of women in the group 15 to 25 years old, with 52,8% for men and 47,7% for women while in the rest of age groups, the figures for men were far from those for women. From 25 to 64 years old group, the numbers of female were around 50% whereas these of male were lower, just 40%. The group of 35 to 44 years old and 45 to 54 years old showed the clear differences between men and women while the figure for men reached the bottom at 39,5% in 35 to 44 years old group and the number of women peaked at 53,3% in 45 to 54 years old group.
Besides, in 65 years old and over ages, men and women paid the same attention to physical activities, with the evidence that the figures for men and women were 46,7% and 47,1 % respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 321, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...e were around 50% whereas these of male were lower, just 40%. The group of 35 to 44 ...
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Line 4, column 63, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld and over ages, men and women paid the same attention to physical activities, w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, regarding, whereas, while, except for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 222.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33333333333 4.92477711251 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29996323523 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481981981982 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 279.9 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.7595733304 43.030603864 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.428571429 112.824112599 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7142857143 22.9334400587 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 5.23603664747 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239652963739 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132068004253 0.103423049105 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101692976538 0.0843802449381 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188059916866 0.15604864568 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757912950166 0.0819641961636 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.39 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.43 11.4140731707 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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