In recent years, the proportion of crimes committed by youngsters is on the rise and families are solely responsible for this trend. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
It is sometimes argued that the increase in the rate of crimes is caused by the breeding of family. While I agree with the idea of the only factor for this trend is families, I do believe that there are other reasons increase this tendency.
On the one hand, parents now are overindulging their children since it derives from excessive love or many families tend to have one child. Consequently, young people behave badly as they are not educated properly. Almost rich families, for example, often use money to "teach" their children, so they always want to get more money from their parentage and it will affect their behavior after that. Furthermore, parents usually face with the busy schedules from day to day and hardly they attended at home. Therefore, they can not understand their youngsters, so children will not received enough love affair, this will impact on their feeling. In details, children do bad things at school and even in the society, or study decadently but their parents do not know.
On the other hand, there are a lot of violent games and action films influence their performance as children often have habits imitation, so media also leads to crimes committed. Children are not old enough to aware which things should be done or should not be done in games or films. For example, some well-known characters in cartoons like Bunny, Batman or even Pokemon still contain factors that may harm children which negatively affects children's sleep. On top of that, cosumer demand is also a main factor for this trend. Children often take a leaf out of their friend's book or see a new thing in the market and want to have it but their parents can not respond them. For this reason, young people form the intention of stealing. Gradually, they will become crimes.
In conclusion, not only the education of family cause the proportion of illegality, there are also many important influences make youngsters become offense.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 591, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'receive'
Suggestion: receive
... their youngsters, so children will not received enough love affair, this will impact on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9303030303 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56744648452 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560606060606 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7920779794 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6875 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131069172309 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485259638876 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577331990476 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104768021648 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589087117413 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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