Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and your opinion.

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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and your opinion.

Submitted by haydar on Fri, 02/23/2018 - 07:28

Lately, people were arguing about the importance of art as one of compulsory course for students at the school. Most people think allocating time to studying art is not worth the time, while others think that learning art is fundamental to balancing students' life. The following paragraph will discuss why learning art is not a necessity, followed by a paragraph that emphasizes the importance of studying art, and my opinion on the issue.

For the last few decades, people push human's technology through science, countless issues were solved using science. This phenomenon triggers a significant demand for workers with a science background. Based on this, schools start to alter its focus to favor science courses more than art. This resulted in fewer people learning art because they already burdened with other academic subjects. Additionally, there are way fewer job prospects in the art industry compared to other industries, making it less attractive.

On the contrary from the previous view, the opposition believes that art is still useful in some occasions. The existing technologies that exist today were built based on science. However, people need to be creative to come up with an innovative solution. This is where art plays its role, study shows that people who able to paint are 50% more effective in solving mathematical problems. It is also known that playing music instrument can release stress and refresh people's mind.

There is no denying that industrial's interest shifted, but art still plays a major role in boost people's creativity and maintaining mental health. I strongly believe that art plays a crucial role in society thus in my opinion schools have to keep art as one of its major courses.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a able'.
Suggestion: who is a able
...plays its role, study shows that people who able to paint are 50% more effective in solv...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, thus, while, in my opinion, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16014234875 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66192646583 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629893238434 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.922424979 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.6666666667 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7333333333 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275578626919 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084430830752 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072118432675 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159508820808 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088849009271 0.056905535591 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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