Cover letter for a job in music industry
Please check and correct my cover letter. Thank you!
My name is AT, I will be graduating from the University of Paris 8 with a master of art in Culture and Communication specialising in Music Industry. I am writing this letter to express my interest in the full-time position as a Social Community Executive for the music streaming service Spotify in Vietnam. While I am convinced that this job will challenge me to take further steps in this professional career, I also feel confident that my experiences in creating contents for different purposes, combined with my interdisciplinary academic background and my passion for music, makes me ideally suited for this position.
Thanks to my dear parents who wanted to develop my artistic sensibility, I had the chance to take piano lessons from the age of six. Music has dramatically influenced every aspect of my life since then as it made me grow into the person I am today. I am obsessed with music and have always desired to be a music connoisseur. I am not just a frequent concert-goer, my passion for music has allowed me to explore myself as a pianist, a music teacher, a manager of a music club which aimed to enhance music skills and sensibility of the youth by offering free concerts and music courses in my hometown.
I was lucky enough to combine these passions and experiences into dream jobs at several communication agencies and the local television. As an intern and a part-time junior editor, I had the chance to participate in the conduct of several artistic and cultural projects (including singing competitions, music programs, and commercial videos) and the creation of editorial contents. They allowed me to develop my skills in reviewing musical performances and writing in-depth features on songs and musicians. They fostered my ability to articulate information and ideas clearly as well as generate engaging contents. I am accustomed to writing articles of different formats, to adapt the writing to different media and to manage any online document and publication. Moreover, I had the opportunity to get familiar with a variety of software of editing photos (Adobe Photoshop and Lightroom) and videos (Adobe Premier and Edius). I’d also learnt that in addition to specific skills, strong interpersonal and collaborative skills are essential.
My prior studies, especially the master’s program at the university of Paris 8, have provided me specialised knowledge in music industry through the relevant coursework in the history of the music industry, the political economy of the music industry, the aesthetic of music, music tastes, etc. I have also learned that the music industry has finally been growing again since 2016 for the first time in over a decade, thanks to streaming services. I am eager to witness how Spotify will change the way Vietnamese people consume music and benefit Vietnamese artists as they have already done in other developed countries in the world.
For all the reasons and motivations mentioned above, I hope that you will take my application into consideration and give me the opportunity to discuss my qualifications in further detail.
I am looking forward to your positive response.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, look, moreover, so, then, well, while, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 24.0651302605 237% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 41.998997996 171% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2696.0 1615.20841683 167% => OK
No of words: 523.0 315.596192385 166% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15487571702 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00847403024 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 176.041082164 160% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539196940727 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 876.6 506.74238477 173% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 5.43587174349 350% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.405108814 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.8 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.15 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296311650829 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803009716047 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076946965045 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127789738802 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847678870523 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 165.0 78.4519038076 210% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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