One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Over the years, with all technological progress, medical care has grown as well, and peoples lives expectancy increased. In my opinion, the benefits of people who live a longer life for the society far outweigh any disadvantage.
Despite the drawbacks bellow, I believe the benefits of people that are living a longer life are extremely useful for society. One important benefit is that they have a greater chance to contribute to developing their country; Therefore, Teachers, researchers, and doctors activate for a longer period of time and they will supply with their mature and experienced ideas to solve problems, come up with methods which young people don't use anymore. Moreover, children will have the opportunity to spend more time with their grandparents, learn more about the traditions, and values of their country. This is a crucial lesson for them as grandparents help children to take their first step in learning to respect and value the place they are coming from.
Admittedly, there is some basic disadvantage that increased life expectancy may bring due to improvements in the medical care. Firstly, if the number of elderly people increases, the government will have to allow a considerable portion of their budget towards elderly care. Secondly, people will choose to retire later and will be much harder for recent graduates to get a job when an experienced candidate holds that position. That will lead to a higher unemployment rate on recent graduates which can cause a negative impact on their country economy.
In conclusion, activating for a longer period of time for the country development, and mentoring the younger generation on essential life skills far outweigh any drawbacks that could result from people living a longer life.
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but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23591549296 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80740255845 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591549295775 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.9906842344 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.181818182 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8181818182 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3636363636 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283789032802 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118024628771 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101143478177 0.0667982634062 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194652470353 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840559194797 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.