Agree or disagree, the most important thing for the governments to improve healthcare is to clean the environment.
As government expenditure on healthcare is getting higher, improving healthcare is important. However, what should government to do to improve healthcare is a highly debated topic. While some people believe the most important thing is to clean the environment, I hold the view that other things are more important.
To begin with, government hopes to improve health as soon as possible, but cleaning the environment may not reach that goal immediately. For instance, no one can tell do people get healthier after government clean the trash on the streets. On the other hand, if authority allocates the budget to reimburse the fee for treatment or medicine for sick people, we know that people would get healthier. Thus, government should invest its resources on other projects which are more practical rather than cleaning the environment.
In the second place, government cares about people and taking care of most people is its priority, but making environment cleaner does not benefit most people. To illustrate, cleaning all the land in a country is impossible for an administration, so it must pick one area to clean first, which would no doubt be the big city instead of countryside, and as a result, it would be unfair for people who live in the countryside. Nonetheless, if government provides financial aid for buying medicine, everyone living in the country can take advantage of the policy.
Last but not least, even if the environment is cleaned and some people get healthier, the desired effect will not last long. Take my country as an example. Twenty years ago, it successfully made the country cleaner and probably made people healthier by forbidding factories to effluent waste water in the river. However, a new problem hurting health, the air pollution, emerged because of increased use of cars. Furthermore, when the authority tried to reduce the carbon dioxide emitted by cars, another environmental issue raised; sand storms coming from other country harmed our people’s health. That is, the most important thing for the governments to improve healthcare is not to clean the environment because although the method works for a while, other environment issues come and hurt people’s health again.
In summary, cleaning environment does not reach government’s goal of improving healthcare, since government emphasizes efficiency and hopes to take of most citizens. Even if cleaning environment seems works, the desired impact disappears soon.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, thus, while, for instance, in summary, no doubt, as a result, to begin with, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34096692112 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95589324416 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549618320611 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1635027504 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.611111111 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 5.45110844103 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369391925096 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119789360343 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987856142772 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234841598927 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0951033059836 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.