Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do- rather than doing things they should do.
It is really difficult to judge about what people should do in their lives and how they should make balance between deeds that human beings like to do and things they should do. Some believe that nowadays people are spending much time on personal enjoyment, time that should be spent on other things which are not desired by the people. On the other hand, I believe that people are spending few time on personal pleasures because they do not have enough time in the modern era life style. Moreover, one should consider that having leasure time is crucial for having a healthy mental living.
The first aspect of the today's life style which deserves to be pointed out is that nowadays people does not have enough time to do their responsibilities towards their employees and workplace, yet alone to have enough time to overspend on personal enjoyment. In the modern era, people has to work at least 8 hours a day; they usually spend a few hours to communicate to work and lunch time. Therefore, most of the time in a day is determined to do things we have to do rather than we are willing to do enjoyfully.
Another point that deserves a word is that spending time on personal leasurements is a crucial condition to have a proper living which consequently helps us do our duties, things we should do, better. In fact, without having fun in our lives, little by little, we ran out of patience and get anxious. Only having fun every now and then would ensure proper functionality of human beings.
Finally, one should not oversee the fact that personal enjoyment is the final purpose for some people. They believe that human beings are meant to have fun in this world as much as they can. For these kind of people, spending a great deal of time on personal enjoyment is reasonable because it helps them fulfill their objectives of their lives.
In a word owing to the causes and elucidations mentioned in the previous paragraphs, it appears reasonable to draw the well founded conclusion that although people require to spend some time on personal enjoyment, they do not because they does not have time for that.
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