Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment.
Modern agriculture method like pesticides or chemical fertilizers are widely used in all over the world, which can bring some negative impact on the environment. However, some people believe that it is important to provide the food for the growing population, so they do not need to care about the negative effects on the environment. As for me, I cannot agree with this statement.
Admittedly, the growing population around the world is the serious problems in 21st century, but will it be the reason for us to destroy the environment?
Most importantly, mismanagement and waste of the foods is a more serious problem than the lack of agricultural areas to produce foods. In China, we can always hear the news about some over-producing agricultural products like bananas in last year. The bananas cannot be sold to the market, even with the pretty low price, because those agricultural products oversupplied for the needs in the local market, and it cannot be kept for a long time or transferred to long-distanced place. Most of those bananas can only be left and start decaying in the farm or the waste yard. It wasted so many foods which can provide a meal for several thousand families in Africa. The main reason of over-producing is without enough managements or regulations in the marketing, and rising price arouse the interests of the farmers to plant more banana trees, which leads to the oversupply of the bananas in the market. From banana's event, we can learn that to develop the managing ability and to reduce the waste of the foods can be an assess to ensure enough food for the increasing population.
Additionally, the better environment can improve the production and quality of the food in agricultural industries. Using some pesticides or chemical fertilizers will cause the polluted water or soil, which can lead that the foods produced by the polluted areas may do a harm on the public health and the polluted areas are not available for growing some agricultural products. Less and less areas for the agricultural industries and harmful foods produced by the polluted areas will exacerbate the problems with no enough foods for the growing population, which could be the vicious cycles.
Simply put, the growing population around the world could not be the reason for us to destroy the environment, but the reason for us to protect the environment for ensuring high-production and high-quality of the food in agricultural industries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, may, so, as for, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02941176471 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93640135246 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463235294118 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.0 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3694633786 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.8 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30060949332 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108625272445 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070726096277 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193349699581 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826745695381 0.0667264976115 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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