Society benefits more from works of great artists than from political leaders. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Perhaps no issue could lead to such debate as to whether the works of artists can bring more society benefits than the counterparts of political leaders. As far as I am concern, the political leaders can have more contributions to benefit the community, even though the value of artists can never be underestimated.
Admittedly, the value of artists can bring a great development for the artworks in a nation, or some commercial value like creating music, making films or attracting tourists. However, all of those are the small part for the entire community, the society or the nation. Compared with artists, political leaders can bring more benefits to society in many other directions.
Most importantly, political leaders will exert the profound influence on the basic living of the citizens, such as reducing the house shortage, better medical services and free education for all children. And China may shed some light on it. The popularizing free education was put forward about 60 years ago and has been well carried out in several decades. Before these laws or regulations was addressed, according some survey, over 80% people in China could not read the book on their own, because they had never got to the school or had only studied for less than 3 years in the primary school. And the girls had less opportunities to get to the school. But now every child in China, no matter a girl or a boy and even in some poor remote areas, can receive the basic education for 9 years, which can ensure them to make a basic living in the modern society. And some other issues like reducing the house shortage or better medical services will be further addressed in the future, by the works from political leaders and not from the artists .
Additionally, the further development for a nation can be affected by the works of political leaders. The reforms of opening in China may be a case to this point. With the great reforms in opening the market to the world, the industries in China have leapt forward. It can inject new vitality into the brightness future in a country and then can enhance the ability to compete in the international stage. Finally, it could boost the economy and earn a well-known reputation for a country. It could be really hard for the artists to make such an achievement.
In closing, the public will benefit more from the successful works form political leaders rather than the counterparts of artists.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...haps no issue could lead to such debate as to whether the works of artists can bring more soc...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...itical leaders. As far as I am concern, the political leaders can have more cont...
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Line 3, column 618, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun opportunities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...n the primary school. And the girls had less opportunities to get to the school. But...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...litical leaders and not from the artists . Additionally, the further development ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, may, really, so, then, well, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 43.0788530466 26% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8345323741 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66014078287 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505995203837 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.394130513 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.105263158 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9473684211 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47368421053 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23318235357 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742112643288 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0865482025866 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161075741009 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729736365338 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.