The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island gazette.
On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increase to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the Island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighbouring island if Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.
The author assumes that to reduce number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by island’s moped rental companies. His line of reasoning is that last year neighbouring island of Seaville attain 50% annual reduction in moped accidents when town council of Seaville enforced similar limit on moped rentals. The argument seems unconvincing in several ways as it fails to provide substantial evidences about population of both towns, number of moped actually rented by rental companies etc.
Firstly the author assumes that solely by restricting the number of moped rented rate of accidents on Balmer Island will decrease. However he fails to realise that with restricted supply of rental mopeds the people in Balmer might purchase the mopeds instead. Also there is every possibility that number of pedestrians might increase instead, with more pedestrians especially with tourists, risk of moped-pedestrians accidents would probably increase.
Secondly the author states that by limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain 50% annual reduction in accidents that was achieved last year on neighbouring island of Seaville, when Seaville enforced similar limits on moped rentals. But what happened in Seaville is not likely to happen in Balmer island. Phehaps there is every possibility that Seaville experienced unusually fair weather conditions, fewer tourists than previous years, which thereby declined need of rental mopeds in that particular year.
Finally the author asserts that the same phenomenon that caused a 50% decline in accidents on island of Seaville will cause similar decline on Balmer island. This assertion is ambiguous as the author did not provide any details about total population of both towns, average number of tourists visiting every year, requirement of rental mopeds. Hence this comparison is void.
In sum to bolster the argument author should provide more statistical data about population of both towns, weather conditions, number of tourists visiting every successive year, requirement of rental mopeds etc. and substantial evidences regarding the comparison made between both the towns.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the argument 3 is very similar to argument 2.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 338 350
No. of Characters: 1848 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.288 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.467 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.669 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.381 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.417 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.64 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The author assumes that to reduce number...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ally rented by rental companies etc. Firstly the author assumes that solely b...
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Line 3, column 136, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...cidents on Balmer Island will decrease. However he fails to realise that with restricte...
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Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...lmer might purchase the mopeds instead. Also there is every possibility that number ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s accidents would probably increase. Secondly the author states that by limit...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ntal mopeds in that particular year. Finally the author asserts that the same...
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Line 7, column 5, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
... mopeds in that particular year. Finally the author asserts that the same phenom...
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Line 7, column 349, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ery year, requirement of rental mopeds. Hence this comparison is void. In sum...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...peds. Hence this comparison is void. In sum to bolster the argument author sh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, regarding, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 338.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61538461538 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72463844096 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458579881657 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7957407534 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.571428571 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228118442437 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940652946973 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761746441212 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139541395072 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600815192037 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.5979740519 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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