The following appeared in a memo from the Dean of students housing of Buckingham college.
" To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham college should build a number of new dormitories, Buckingham's enrollment is growing and based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making the existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham.
The Director of Buckingham College assumes that the cost of off campus housing has increased in recent years. And under the notion that enrollment of students is growing rapidly so there is possibility that it may double in coming years and will make the existing dormitories inadequate. Hence Dean’s line of reasoning is that an attractive new dormitory will serve the housing needs of students as well as will make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham.
Firstly the Dean hastily predicts what is going to happen in future on the basis of current trends as we all know that companies that make plans and implement them on the basis of assumptions are most likely to suffer heavily in future. So its rather childish to make such an assumption.
Secondly the Dean assumes that enrollments are going to double in next 50 years. Since we don’t have actual statistical data about number of enrollments now and then we cannot say that building new dormitories will be a profitable decision. Suppose that number of students is 100, so in 50 years it will be 200. Thus building new dormitories just for the sake of these additional 100 students is not worth considerable.
Also the Dean asserts confidently that even after 50 years the off campus accommodation will remain costlier than dormitory. But he does not consider the factors that are leading to drift in prices of new apartments in future which include governments aids, land prices, cost of construction etc. which are going to prevail in next 50 years. Hence Dean’s assumption is too much emphasizing since he is neglecting the various internal factors like alumni, students development, research programs etc. and various external factors such as government policies, available funds etc.
In sum it is quite clear that the Dean’s assumption of building new dormitories is negotiable at the moment and instead this fund should be used for developing the research and other academic facilities. Hence the Dean should reconsider his stand and must provide better evidences which makes the assumption more sound and convincing.
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- The following appeared in a memo from the Dean of students housing of Buckingham college." To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham college should build a number of new dormitories, Buckingham's enrollment is growing and based on current tre 41
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 347 350
No. of Characters: 1731 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.316 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.988 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.707 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.786 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.799 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.621 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The Director of Buckingham College assum...
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Line 1, column 293, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ke the existing dormitories inadequate. Hence Dean's line of reasoning is that a...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...more likely to enroll at Buckingham. Firstly the Dean hastily predicts what i...
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Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...tions are most likely to suffer heavily in future. So its rather childish to make such an...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...childish to make such an assumption. Secondly the Dean assumes that enrollmen...
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Line 5, column 75, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... enrollments are going to double in next 50 years. Since we don't have actua...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... students is not worth considerable. Also the Dean asserts confidently that e...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ents is not worth considerable. Also the Dean asserts confidently that even ...
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Line 7, column 281, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lude governments aids, land prices, cost of construction etc. which are going to ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... are going to prevail in next 50 years. Hence Dean's assumption is too much emph...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nment policies, available funds etc. In sum it is quite clear that the Dean&a...
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Line 9, column 212, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...research and other academic facilities. Hence the Dean should reconsider his stand an...
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Line 9, column 343, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e assumption more sound and convincing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 346.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17052023121 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82338583405 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546242774566 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2738491108 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.8125 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237907401429 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700079329192 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721967201899 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123463832216 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923694721249 0.0628817314937 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.