The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.You should write at least 150 words.

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The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
You should write at least 150 words.

Submitted by Lannhim on Wed, 06/13/2018 - 13:31

The line graph illustrates ìnormation on cinema attendence in the UK.
Overall, the graph shows an upward trend in the rate of age group of attendance in UK and all of four aged group droped in 2000.
To be specific, in 1990 the percentage of aged 14-24 was lowest (15%) next is aged 24-34 with 24%, the percentage were got lower rate of cinema attendencetyan aged 44-54(39%). 1990, the percentage of attendance in cinema in UK supply increased 5%. 2000, the percentage cinema attendance in the UK decreased significantly by 5% in aged 14-24 and 44-54, 10 percent in aged 24-34 and 34-44. 2005, the rate of aged 24-34 rise the most by 15% meanwhile the rate of aged 44-54,14-24 rose as high as that in aged 24-34 ( 10 percent) . In 2010, the rate of aged 24-34 remained unchanged while the proportion of age 44-54,14-24 and 34-44 slight went up.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 108, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'group' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'groups'.
Suggestion: groups
...f attendance in UK and all of four aged group droped in 2000. To be specific, in 199...
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Line 3, column 177, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nema attendencetyan aged 44-5439%. 1990, the percentage of attendance in cinema i...
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Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...14-24 rose as high as that in aged 24-34 10 percent . In 2010, the rate of aged 2...
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Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s high as that in aged 24-34 10 percent . In 2010, the rate of aged 24-34 remaine...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 691.0 965.302439024 72% => OK
No of words: 150.0 196.424390244 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60666666667 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7056202034 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 78.0 106.607317073 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 192.6 283.868780488 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.075546322 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7142857143 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.28571428571 5.23603664747 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0696299993042 0.215688989381 32% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730384198452 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802616169569 0.0843802449381 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114452722759 0.15604864568 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089839596196 0.0819641961636 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 21.0 40.7170731707 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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