The table below gives information about the percentage of workong force employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by secleting and reporting the main features and makr comparison where relevant.

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The table below gives information about the percentage of workong force employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by secleting and reporting the main features and makr comparison where relevant.

The given table illustrate that the proportion of the workers in six industries in Australia during 1989 to 2009. It can be seen that Manufacturing industry holds maximum percentage of that workers. however, the tourism had least proportion of workforce.

It is Crystal clear that in only two industries (Manufacturing and Retail)the workforce decreased. The noticeable point is that there were comparatively more decrease in percentage of workers in Manufacturing industry (15-9.8) than Retail industry (11.8-10.1) during 1989 to 2009.

Next, A slight increase can be seen in other Industries that were healthcare, construction, Education and Tourism. There is a remarkable point that the proportion of employees in tourism industry became equal to education's workforce by 2009.

To conclude, In most of the industries number of employees increased slightly. however, in two industries namely Manufacturing and Retail the proportion of workforce decreased.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 819.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 142.0 196.424390244 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7676056338 4.92477711251 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.45201032557 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24660107924 2.65546596893 122% => OK
Unique words: 72.0 106.607317073 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507042253521 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 239.4 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6296086097 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7777777778 22.9334400587 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.777777777778 5.23603664747 15% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143763944003 0.215688989381 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673317182545 0.103423049105 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623013916214 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0958305298152 0.15604864568 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473183768149 0.0819641961636 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 61.2550243902 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.89 11.4140731707 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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