TOPIC - SCHOOL SHOULD DO MORE TO PREPARE STUDENTS FOR THE NON-ACADEMIC ASPECT OF ADULTHOOD.
WRITE A RESPONSE IN WHICH YOU DISCUSS THE EXTEND TO WHICH YOU ARE AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THE RECOMMENDATION AND EXPLAIN YOUR REASONING FOR THE POSITION YOU TAKE. IN DEVELOPING AND SUPPORTING YOUR POSITION,
BE SURE TO ADDRESS THE MOST COMPELLING REASONS AND/OR EXAMPLES THAT COULD BE USED TO CHALLENGE YOUR POSITION.
Childhood are the days to be remembered! Those days often creates the myriad number of memories to live with. The grasping power are always high in the childhood which start to be decadent in the later period of life. Brain worked with peak of it limit in those days. School studies has the impact on the person for lifetime. Right from studying poems to learning minute things by the observation and understanding. School is most powerful institute which creates the healthy social life. Most of things are dependent on school. By preparing students for the adulthood is the ultimate aim for the school however, inclusion of non-academic aspect for the small aged students can be abstruse to them. Because they already have the burden of academic activities.
Firstly, school days were consisting of pack schedule of academic and non-academic studies. Apart of studies children are more attracted towards games and plays. They are cannot imagine the days filled with more maturity this will create extra pressure on them to behave like adults. If adulthood is teach in a school by non-academic way it will lead the reason behind losing childhood. At the young age students has various academic studies to do in a day which includes the most of the time span. So if the non-academic studies will affect them with bizarre way. For normal child which will learn thing by experienced which will be in his memory forever it is the natural process to learn.
Secondly, the extra burden on anything leads to collapse that thing. Adding non-academic burden over student will carry forward in debacle of his performance. Even horse can not sustain the extra pressure on them perhaps, that it is physical pressure which we can see but, we can not pre-empt the hilarious pressure on child mind. It will leads affect to mental and physical ability of student in the bad way. Pressure is good to practice in physics but not on child mind.
Lastly, everything has the natural way to behave which is the ideal in all the situations. The child can learn adulthood by time. Time is the best cure available over an earth. Even plants has require time to grow which is the natural process. Like this child can learn in augmented way with the experience he had in childhood. With this they can enjoy childhood without the unwanted pressure of adulthood.
But, every coin has two sides, adding non-academic aspect of adulthood in early stage might work as catalyst in the process. But, it is not the ideal situation. Several factors like decision making, treating people etc. can be improved in there, childhood by the controlled environment. This can be a speedy way but, it contains high risk of failure.
At the end we can say that without adding the burden on the child they can enter into the adulthood by the natural process. Non-Academics can contain there, favourite sport, hobby, extra curricular activities etc. Which enhance there, chances having the cherish memories and leads to better life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
Childhood are the days to be remembered! Those days o...
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Line 2, column 146, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to minute'
Suggestion: to minute
.... Right from studying poems to learning minute things by the observation and understan...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the things') or simply say ''Most things''.
Suggestion: Most of the things; Most things
...which creates the healthy social life. Most of things are dependent on school. By preparing s...
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Line 3, column 210, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... aged students can be abstruse to them. Because they already have the burden of academi...
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Line 5, column 22, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...mic activities. Firstly, school days were consisting of pack schedule of academic and non-ac...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: APART_A_PART[2]
Message: Wrong collocation. Did you mean 'apart from'?
Suggestion: Apart from
...e of academic and non-academic studies. Apart of studies children are more attracted tow...
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Line 5, column 285, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...pressure on them to behave like adults. If adulthood is teach in a school by non-a...
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Line 6, column 17, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'taught'.
Suggestion: taught
...o behave like adults. If adulthood is teach in a school by non-academic way it will...
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Line 6, column 216, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ich includes the most of the time span. So if the non-academic studies will affect th...
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Line 11, column 194, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
...vailable over an earth. Even plants has require time to grow which is the natural proce...
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Line 14, column 299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the controlled environment. This can be a speedy way but, it contains high risk ...
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Line 17, column 251, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...tc. Which enhance there, chances having the cherish memories and leads to better life. ...
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Line 17, column 284, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...having the cherish memories and leads to better life.
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Line 18, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sh memories and leads to better life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2516.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 506.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97233201581 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53036983172 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470355731225 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.2370786517 173% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5818279138 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.8857142857 118.986275619 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4571428571 23.4991977007 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.77142857143 5.21951772744 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 12.0 4.97078651685 241% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202487799991 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518935471754 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530099845506 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876326342367 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624654583447 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.1392134831 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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