People should look after their health as a duty to the society they live in rather than only for
their own personal benefit. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Personal healthcare has been highlighted as an emerging issue, escaping broader public attention in recent years. Despite the suggestion prioritizing healthcare for social benefits, indiviuals should pay attention to their health for both personal and social interests.
People should pay attention to their health for personal benefits. First, individuals’s ignorance to health could practically culminate in their overconsumption of unhealthy sugar-dense products teeming with carginogenic substances and preservatives. This means that the possibilities of consumers’s constracting cardiorvascular diseases or even cancers are strong, shortening their life expectancy. Second, the involvement in excercise activities would correlate with people’s health betterment. For instance, jogging balances blood pressure and minimizes fat accumulation, preventing many health risks.
Nevertheless, individuals take care of their health for social interests. First, increased health issues stemming from personal health irresponsibilites are associated with increased hospital admissions. If this pattern continue, the deterioration of hospitals’ facilities and treatment quality could inevitable, demanding greater governments’ capital injection, which can minimize disbursements on other social sectors and services. In addition, due to personal health negligence, people could be more susceptible to contagious conditions, the emergence of an epidemic is highly likely. For example, many citizens in Western Africa are infected with Ebola because of insanitary living conditions, inadequate self-care guidance and personal health awereness, making the disease spread to many other regions, becoming the deadliest epidemic in humans’ history.
In conclusion, individuals should take care of themselves on both personal and social grounds. Better health consciousness could decrease many health risks and act as an incentive for social stability in the long term.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, nevertheless, second, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.62595419847 5.12529762239 129% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.44870931571 2.80592935109 123% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.629770992366 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.60771543086 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9327548252 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216546065589 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923763111509 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740442451664 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143435334095 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341551875213 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.37 50.2224549098 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 21.17 12.4159519038 171% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.98 8.58950901804 128% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.