The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Huong Ng on Wed, 08/08/2018 - 22:04

The diagrams provided illustrates how the salmon, which is a quite large fish among its pieces, lives in its whole life.

It is clear that the salmons need to go through three important stages in their life cycle. In each stage, their size changes significantly than the previous step.

First of all, the salmons’ eggs lay around small stones under reeds for approximately 6 months in the slow moving upper river before they move to the lower river where water flow faster. At this later stage, they are called fry, a small salmon infant, whose size varies from 3 to 8 centimetres. After 4 years, their size continues to change into 12 to 15 centimetres and they will be called smolt at this period. They will be identified as adult salmons when their size reaches 70 to 76 centimetres and they live in open sea areas. Where they will spend 5 years of living. At this final stage, they are able to produce eggs in the similar environment they were born before.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 38, Rule ID: LAY_AROUND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lie around'?
Suggestion: lie around
... First of all, the salmons' eggs lay around small stones under reeds for approximat...
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Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...all stones under reeds for approximately 6 months in the slow moving upper river ...
^^
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hs in the slow moving upper river before they move to the lower river where water...
^^
Line 5, column 540, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Where” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...metres and they live in open sea areas. Where they will spend 5 years of living. At t...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 5.60731707317 339% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 802.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66279069767 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41014845518 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.691860465116 0.547539520022 126% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2598183049 43.030603864 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1111111111 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1111111111 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55555555556 5.23603664747 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106390243684 0.215688989381 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481550535341 0.103423049105 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440967380152 0.0843802449381 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0868941221408 0.15604864568 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472196875565 0.0819641961636 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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