THE ARTS (MUSIC, DANCE, VISUAL ARTS) ARE MUCH LESS IMPORTANT TO STUDENTS' FUTURES THAN ACADEMIC SUBJECTS SUCH AS MATH, HISTORY, ENGLISH AND SCIENCE. THE ARTS SHOULD BE DE-EMPHASIZED IN SCHOOLS.
Schools are institutions where children, irrespective of their background or other factors, come together to educate themselves about various subjects which might or might not be used later in life. When students grow up, they choose to study particular subjects towards which they are inclined and grow successfully in those streams. Arts is a major subject in various schools where students learn about their artistic capabilities as well as creative inclinations. De-emphasizing arts in schools might lead to robbing students of various opportunities in the creative sector.
"Medicine, Law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits and necessary to sustain life. But poetry, romance, beauty, love, these are what we stay alive for." This is a quote from a famous movie, The dead poet's society; it aptly describes why we need arts. We have engineers, scientists, doctors and architects shaping the world in which we are currently living. On the other hand, we also have poets, singers, artists, painters which are also responsible for making our world a beautiful place to live in. Music brings together people from all around the world. Students use music as a way to relax from the hectic academics. Arts such as painting, dance can help students realise their passion for it if they want to pursue it at all.
While some students might be good in academic subjects, some might be more inclined towards creativity. The world has seen famous intellectuals such as Einstein, Nikolas Tesla, Robert Kook, Graham Bell but it has also seen famous artists such as Vincent Van Gogh, Picasso, Beethoven and Michael Jackson to name a few. In previous times, artists had to go through a rough time exactly due to the fact that arts were not promoted in schools. Still, the world appreciated their talent when they shone through with their masterpieces. Reducing the participation for arts in school might restrict the world in finding such gems in the future.
Academic subjects provide food for the brain, while arts provides food for the soul. As humans, we are passionate and art is what expresses our passion. Music, Dance, Paintings, Visual arts, all express our feelings when words are not enough. Schools should treat academic subjects and arts equally so that students have the opportunity to find what they like and pursue it in the future. We need artists as much as we need intellectuals and professionals.
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| 2018-10-01 | Riya Jadhav | 50 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'poets'' or 'poet's'?
Suggestion: poets'; poet's
...s a quote from a famous movie, The dead poets society; it aptly describes why we need...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, well, while, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 396.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17171717172 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73200580691 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560606060606 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3632215836 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5238095238 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249826277735 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739819795949 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576324289167 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152379147976 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517973503975 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.