Many people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others argue that happiness depends on other factors. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
The definition of happiness is perceived differently by different individuals. Some may emphasize the well-being of financial state as the root of happiness, others derive pleasure from other aspects of life. I support the idea that happiness can be achieved in simplicities of life without economic prosperity.
On the one hand, for some people, money is the prerequisite in deciding happiness, especially in this materialistic world. Being affluent brings convenience to everything related directly to people’s life, from their basic needs of a shelter to more high-class ones of entertainment forms. For example, individuals with economic well-being can enjoy a superior lifestyle that others cannot. They may travel abroad twice a year, receive better service for charging more at a five-star hotel or have sufficient financial conditions to provide their children with an excellent education in international schools. To them, not having to worry about materials is the root of their own happiness.
On the other hand, I side with many that happiness depends on other factors, such as health, social status or relationship; financial prosperity cannot create this feeling of happiness. Take health as an example. It goes without saying that eventually the body is the only place people get to live in, and money would be nothing if one day they are diagnosed with fatal diseases with no cure at all. Or for some individuals, gaining respect from surrounding people and having a chance of self-actualization is much more crucial than being better-off. They obtain the core pleasure from leaving a mark of their own identity in people’s mind, and money is nothing but just a mediocre accessory. In other cases, happiness stems from being loved and cherished, because people cannot live solitarily without any fellowship all their lives.
In conclusion, I believe money is no other than a means to facilitate our living experience. What truly means happiness for me comes from spiritual values one receives from all walks of life, rather than merely physical possessions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 89, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'emphasizes'.
Suggestion: emphasizes
...ntly by different individuals. Some may emphasize the well-being of financial state as th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3556231003 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0167720666 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598784194529 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1983431251 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.125 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188054252506 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641349004324 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675207632177 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118116988275 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500438828484 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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