Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days there is a lot of debate about people’s lifestyle and the amount of time which they spend on their leisure activities. Many people claim that nowadays, spending time which is related to personal activities is too much than any time before, while others, as I do, hold the opposite opinion. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, thanks to the new invention, job adversity is more than before. It means people’s choices are more than before, and they can find their interested job easily. Today, some occupations such as computer engineering, Information Technology (IT) engineering, pilot, and other occupations related to the internet and other new invention are more available; these varieties cause people to find a position which is matched with their favorites. It has been motivated people not only to spend more time on their work but also encouraged them to take on new responsibilities and being organized. Furthermore, as a computer engineer, for example, I know that being expert on it takes a lot of educational experience and skills and when I get my job I take it seriously because I know it takes a lot of time and hardships to make me a computer engineering.
Secondly, competition for getting a job position is intense. It is an undeniable fact that finding a well-paid job with good fringe benefits is really hard. Even though different types of careers are available, more educated and master people looking for the same career which makes it difficult to find a position. My own experience is a compelling example of what I mean. When I applied to university for admission, I failed to gain admission to the University of my choice because the competition was very intense. I had to apply to several universities for admission and when I was accepted in the university, I tried to do my job to the best of my ability. I evaded my leisure time and spent more time to study. If my apply process was not competitive, I would definitely hesitate to study hard and persevering.
In conclusion, it may seem that people spend more time on their personal activities, but I believe they consider their responsibility and do their tasks. I feel this way because people can find their favorite careers and avoid to do a boring job and because the competition to get a workplace is highly intense and people try to do their best to achieve their goal.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 29, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
...ing essay. First of all, thanks to the new invention, job adversity is more than before. It ...
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Line 2, column 334, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
...tions related to the internet and other new invention are more available; these varieties cau...
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Line 4, column 221, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid doing'.
Suggestion: avoid doing
...ple can find their favorite careers and avoid to do a boring job and because the competitio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2021.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80047505938 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9144147797 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489311163895 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1985896076 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.277777778 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3888888889 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.55555555556 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189768958068 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06080774657 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658877417335 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136288478324 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756886544725 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.