In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural conditions or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Afghanistan is a developing and poor country that needs to be developed and industrialized. Clearly, land usage can play an important role in that process. The Small population of the country and the necessity of industrialization are the key factors that I think there is more need for lands to be developed in housing and industry.
First of all, the small population of Afghanistan areis, in many regions and metropolitans, concentrated in small areas and there is a need for lands to be developed for a dwelling of such a compacted population. For example, in Kabul, the capital, a large population are have dwelled in a relatively small metropolitan. Only a little portion of the city, where called the New Kabul, enjoys the advantage of an acceptable and appropriate housing and dwelling conditions. Nevertheless, the majority of inhabitants of the city are living in poor and difficult conditions in compacted areas, needing a larger space to live and enjoy the life. Consequently, many municipal services, such as trash gathering, can not be done in such compacted areas. As a result, most of the dwellers are exposed to many harmful infectious diseases in those areas. In addition, since many members of the city dwellers are young people, they need hobby and entertainment facilities such as football fields, tennis clubs, cinema etc. So, developing the natural lands and turning them into metropolitan areas is essential for the country.
Second, Such a country which is less developed needs to extend its industrial areas such as dairy and textile manufactures. Since Afghanistan is less contributing to, and therefore less responsible for, the global warming, the leaders should invest more and more in developing and extending the industry sector. This is especially essential because many staple commodities are being imported in the post-war years. If the authorities decide to encourage investors to extend the land usage, they may promote the self-sufficiency indexes of the country. Hence, it so important to turn the natural lands into industrial complexes.
All in all, I think in my country, Afghanistan, there is more need to develop and use lands for housing and industrial purposes. If the leaders decide to increase the land usage, many social and economics challenges could be solved.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 272, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
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Line 4, column 179, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun social seems to be countable; consider using: 'many socials'.
Suggestion: many socials
...ders decide to increase the land usage, many social and economics challenges could be solve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, for example, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22849462366 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08267000768 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.006673826 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.055555556 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.55555555556 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399723562567 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126620702832 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109372404379 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287512522539 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612701362502 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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