Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child (5-10 years old)?
1. Being helpful
2. Being honest
3. Being well organized
It is widely acknowledged that valuable qualities should be inculcated in children as early as possible, since younger children tend to be moulded more easily by the outside world than older ones. Among the three possible values—being helpful, being honest and being well-organized—I reckon honesty the most important trait that children should develop from a young age.
Honesty is without a doubt the basic principle that every individual should live by all along one’s life. Fostering this quality in young children would yield the most benefits not only for themselves but also for the community. For one thing, being honest is one of the most important considerations in any relationships, in the promotion of employees, and in the election of leaders, etc. It is not an overstatement that honesty is a prerequisite of a promising future, and there is every reason to share with young children. For another thing,dishonesty can erode any organization. For example, a person who discloses the company’s confidential information to a competitor might be the one who lied about the unfinished homework to teachers at a young age. With no warning or punishment, children might deem it not big deal to lie and have little awareness of how severe it is. One can be less helpful or not organized, but being dishonest would be disastrous. Therefore, it is imperative to educate children to be honest; the earlier, the better.
On the other hand, it is not that realistic to expect children between five and ten years old to be a big help or do things in a well-organized way. Children at this age are usually not physically or mentally mature to comprehend complex issues or figure out feasible solutions. The fact is that these abilities can only be obtained through real life experience, rather than through instructions from the elders. Furthermore, I doubt, to some extent, whether being well-organized is of benefit to children because the children’s nature of curiosity and free-thinking may be restricted. Indeed, children should not be deprived of their own way to see the world or do things, be it ridiculous or not, since this is how imagination and creativity flourish.
In conclusion, regarding the most favorable qualities that children should develop, I believe honesty should be given top priority. The reason is that honesty lays the foundation of the prosperity of both individuals and society, while the other two qualities (being helpful and well-organized) are likely either to be unrealistic or to restrict children’s development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, another thing, for example, i reckon, in conclusion, for another thing, for one thing, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23188405797 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22990125697 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541062801932 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3371793165 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.333333333 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.77777777778 5.45110844103 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382244876384 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13287050984 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101896104591 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257689494275 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460563577641 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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