Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the invention of computers, Games played vital role in each children's live. Computer games are one of essential part of our life since it becomes an industry. Although many people believe that playing game and game industry have benefit for children, others think its adverse effect have more weight. From my vantage point, I concur with the latter group and the line will shed on my viewpoint.
First of all, playing game puts student's success in school at a disadvantage. There are many amazing game on computers and they attract not only kids but also even adults. Parents should limit playing games since student can harm their grade at the school if they play game long hours. Furthermore, game addition is harmful for kid's health. Some of games increase children's stress level and make them aggressive. Consequently, games harm not only success but also health.
Secondly, boys and girl,especially in stage of learning new knowledge, ought spend time with their friends at outside of home. According to the research study which conducted at MIT University by the team of reputable scientists, children who spend time with classmates tend to be more social rather than children who plays games. As a result, games alienate kids and make them less attractive. Moreover, some games, for example GTA vice city, encourage violence. Kids accept the game characters as a role model.
Wrap it up, one can conclude that computer games might harm the quality of children's life. To forbid them untill certain age is the only solution. I think all parents should forbid or limit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1326.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 263.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04182509506 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49333422964 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642585551331 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3637560437 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6666666667 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6111111111 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253987199804 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766773765111 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430877845288 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150756526499 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028392572572 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.36 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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