one of the best ways that parents can help their children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that take part-time job has a lot of social and psychological benefits for teenage children. Thus, from the past to present, parents always encourage their teenage children to have had a part-time job. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that teenagers should not waste their time for any job rather than study for school courses, because the most important thing that determines the success of them in the future would be good grades at school. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that one of the best ways that parents can help their children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
First and foremost, a part-time job has a positive effect on the socialization process of teenagers. For example, when I was 16 years old, I was working in a veterinary clinic. In this clinic I worked with five other people, it was a valuable experience to me because I learn team working and I found out that how a respectful communication would be beneficial for the progress of the group aims. In addition, I practised to explain my idea about different issues and it increased my self-confidence to involve in discussions at school.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that through a part-time job children practice financial independence. Unfortunately, today a lot of young people are still dependent on their parents for financial support. They did not learn to be responsible for own life. However, a part-time job would be a good opportunity for children to understand how making money is important and enjoyable for everyone.
Finally, yet importantly, a job experience can power person resumes for getting future job positions. It is a very positive factor in interviewers point of view, if you have had several job experience during the teenage period of life. It shows that the applicant is a serious employee with appropriate social skills.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that parents by motivate their teenage children to take part-time job help them to be a more successful person in their future life. Because of a part-time job can improve social skills, responsibility, financial independence and provide them with powerful CV.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to team'
Suggestion: to team
...luable experience to me because I learn team working and I found out that how a resp...
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Line 5, column 432, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s important and enjoyable for everyone. Finally, yet importantly, a job experien...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, so, still, thus, for example, in addition, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03116883117 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92945562141 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524675324675 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3484846658 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.941176471 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6470588235 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.516484006179 0.236089414692 219% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166206786822 0.076458572812 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.172675456613 0.0737576698707 234% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279258599968 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.184448151635 0.0645574589148 286% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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