Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
It goes without saying that in this sophisticated modern life where we live, people face many challenges and have to keep pace with this fast-changing life. In this regard, while there are some people who believe that humans should have few works to do, others stay at the end of the continuum and hold on the view that they should be the jack-of-all-trades. As far as I am concerned, people should do few works in a proper way because not only can they be experts on that field, but they also will have more pleasure times in their life. In the following, I will elaborate on my reasons.
First and foremost, by doing a few works with higher quality, people would be specialized on them. For more clarification, when people focus on some special works, they could understand and analyze them deeply. Consequently, the more they spend time on a specific field, the more they would be skillful in. Take my personal experience as an example. I remember when I was in high school, and I attended to many different classes. In fact, because I wanted to experience many new fielded, I went to variable classes like Yoga, guitar, math, hiking and aerobics. Besides, I had to study as well as possible to be accepted in the university entrance exam. As a result, I had less time to allocate on all the classes that I was attending. Neither did I study enough, nor did I spend time in order to practice the assignments of classes. After a while, because of being bored and busy, I decided to cancel all my classes except Yoga, letting me be more relax and fresh. As a consequence, I had enough time to study deeply, and I ranked very well in my exam. So, had I not canceled the classes, I could not have been qualified in my exam.
To begin with last but not least, doing a few works help people to be more relaxed in their lives. To be more specific, in the case of be multi-tasking, persons would have to be engaged in different responsibilities which make them be stressful. What is more, they do not have enough time to rest. Having done a few works, people are able to have more leisure times causing them be delightful. An example can drive this notion home. When a person has to work in different area, she is too busy to think about resting. In fact, she gets involved in variable works and thinks about them all the times. Consequently, she would feel exhausted after a period, and would not have fun in her life. By reducing her responsibilities, she can be more easygoing in order to enjoy life. Nowadays, people forget the reason for living, and want to attend to different tasks to be more active and adept to fast-changing life.
Finally, by taking all these reasons and examples mentioned previously into account, people should do a few works in an appropriate way in order to be more adept in those fields. Furthermore, they would experience an enjoyable life which makes them be cheerful. To put it another way, who can ignore the positive in fact of working deeply in one area?
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...m concerned, people should do few works in a proper way because not only can they be experts on...
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Line 2, column 406, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...I was in high school, and I attended to many different classes. In fact, because I wanted to e...
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Line 4, column 115, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate way" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...o account, people should do a few works in an appropriate way in order to be more adept in those fiel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, so, well, while, as to, in fact, as a result, as well as, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2454.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55287569573 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68783085823 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47680890538 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 782.1 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8695554359 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6206896552 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5862068966 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.24137931034 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223566150245 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608663186988 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587265669953 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147808006779 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392492720256 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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