Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
To be true, Advertisement, the oxygen for businesses, attracts our immediate attention because of the fact that we are now living in a consumer culture and surrounded by ads every time. The emergence of electronic and social media has made it inevitable for anyone to get rid of ads. In my opinion, the massive presence of advertisements have a detrimental impact on people; hence, our society suffers.
To begin with, the pivotal importance of advertisement is undeniable for businesses. Therefore, companies do not leave any stone unturned in order to attract their clients through promotion. The increased use of stunts in commercials, particularly for energy drinks, attracts the children and teenagers; hence, they tried to imitate the stunts which often performed by professionals in control environment under experts supervision. Verily, imitation of stunts by juveniles without the guidance of experts cause severe injuries.
Moreover, Nowadays, advertisers have diverted advertisement towards children because they are easy to manipulate. Many fast food chains use cartoon characters to attract teenagers; hence, youngsters force their parents to buy those products which are not suitable for health. Use of calories dense and high fat-saturated food increased the problem of obesity among youngsters, which is one of the most significant challenges nations are facing these days.
To conclude, the efforts to promote business have benefits for businesses on the one hand; however, the success of businesses comes at the cost of people health. The increasing consumption of junk food creating obesity issues on one end, on the other hand, youngsters are losing body parts while copying the stunts from ads.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...esses, attracts our immediate attention because of the fact that we are now living in a consumer culture...
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Line 3, column 413, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'experts'' or 'expert's'?
Suggestion: experts'; expert's
...fessionals in control environment under experts supervision. Verily, imitation of stunt...
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Line 7, column 326, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...arts while copying the stunts from ads.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 965.302439024 152% => OK
No of words: 264.0 196.424390244 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54166666667 4.92477711251 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00880394356 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 106.607317073 159% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643939393939 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 283.868780488 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2071620432 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.916666667 112.824112599 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.23603664747 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0408948344988 0.215688989381 19% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0143653123013 0.103423049105 14% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0195650204073 0.0843802449381 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0237753785117 0.15604864568 15% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158792901591 0.0819641961636 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 61.2550243902 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 11.4140731707 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.06136585366 121% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 40.7170731707 206% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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